自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and tense errors. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'first' and 'later').

示例: Yes. I had two bikes as a child. First, I had a tricycle when I was very young to learn balance. Later, in secondary school, I had a small bicycle that I used to ride to my friends’ houses.

建议: Give a clear direct opinion then support it with two specific reasons. Reduce hesitations and pronunciation errors, and use correct subject-verb agreement. Use linking words like 'however' and 'because' for coherence.

示例: I think bikes used to be very popular in my country, but their popularity has declined. In the past, many people used bicycles and motorbikes for short trips; however, now more people prefer cars because roads have improved and incomes have risen, making car ownership easier.

× As I remembered, I had AI had two bikes when I I was a child.

✓ As I remember, I had two bikes when I was a child.

The sentence mixes past and present reference incorrectly and contains duplicated words. 'As I remembered' sounds awkward for a simple past recollection; use 'As I remember' or 'I remember' for a present reflection about a past fact. Remove the repeated 'had' and duplicate 'I'. Use 'I was a child' for the past time clause.

× The first one is when I'm I was a little kid and I have a tricycle to help me practice with riding a bike and the second bike is when I'm in the secondary school they used to.

✓ The first one was when I was a little kid and I had a tricycle to help me practice riding a bike, and the second bike was when I was in secondary school.

Tense consistency: describe past events using past tense ('was', 'had'). Remove mixed present forms ('I'm') and unnecessary 'with' after 'practice'. 'They used to' is unclear and unnecessary here; instead state the time when the second bike was obtained. Also remove the article before 'secondary school' if referring generally.

× I think bites used to be popular in my country, umm, in the old days people usually travel by bikes and motorbikes, but right now cars is more popular because we have bigger road and we uh are more advanced in technology.

✓ I think bikes used to be popular in my country. In the old days people usually travelled by bikes and motorbikes, but right now cars are more popular because we have bigger roads and we are more advanced in technology.

Multiple issues: 'bites' is a spelling error for 'bikes'. Use past tense 'used to be' and past simple 'travelled' for habitual past. Subject-verb agreement: 'cars are' (plural subject requires plural verb) not 'cars is'. 'Road' should be plural 'roads' when speaking generally. Remove filler 'uh' and fix punctuation by splitting into two sentences for clarity.