自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your response simply repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. Give a direct, concise answer (one topic sentence) and, if helpful, one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Keep to a maximum of five sentences and avoid redundancy.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present when I was seven, and I practiced riding it every weekend in the park. As a result, I became quite confident cycling on quiet streets by the time I was ten.

建议: Your answer is on the right track but needs a clearer structure and more precise language. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because/for instance). Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short journeys. For example, many children ride their bikes to and from school, and some adults use them to commute in busy city areas.

× Yes. And you think that bikes are popular in my country I see people, children especially, riding them after school and I remember that I used to learn riding bikes, but.

✓ Yes. I think bikes are popular in my country. I see people, especially children, riding them after school, and I remember that I used to learn to ride bikes.

Problems: run-on sentence and incorrect conjunctions/phrase order. The original begins with 'And you think' which is inappropriate as a response and creates a fragment; it also lacks punctuation and has awkward verb forms ('learn riding bikes'). This falls under 'Incorrect conjunction use' (17) and sentence structure issues. Corrections made: start with 'I think' to directly answer; split into two sentences for clarity; place 'especially' next to 'children' for correct modifier order; use 'learn to ride' (infinitive) which is the correct collocation in English. Suggestion: avoid starting replies with 'And' when not continuing someone else's sentence, use proper sentence boundaries, and use 'learn to ride' rather than 'learn riding'.