自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, correct grammar, and keep it concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, and avoid repetition. Link ideas with a short connector if needed.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it every weekend in the local park because it was a fun way to exercise and explore with my friends.

建议: Answer directly, reduce hesitation, and organize information with linking words. Use clear vocabulary and specific examples (name, how it works, where people ride). Keep it to two to three sentences and avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'.

示例: Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly popular in my country because of the city bike-sharing system in Seoul. For example, the Ttareungi program lets people rent a bike for an hour or two and ride along the Han River or nearby lakes, which makes cycling convenient and affordable.

× Yes, I have my one bike when I was a child and I liked, but I like riding the bike during weekends in the park.

✓ Yes, I had one bike when I was a child and I liked it, and now I like riding my bike on weekends in the park.

Multiple problems: 5: Past tense issue — 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. 22: Article errors/1: Singular and plural issue — 'my one bike' is unnatural; use 'one bike' or 'my bike'. 23/26: Sentence structure errors — 'and I liked, but I like' is fragmented and unclear. 13: Pronoun/clarity — missing object 'it' after 'liked'. Correction: change verbs to appropriate tenses ('had' for past ownership; 'liked' to refer to past feeling; 'now I like' for present habit), use 'my bike' or 'one bike', add 'it' after 'liked', and use 'on weekends' (common preposition) instead of 'during weekends'. Suggestions: Keep past events in past tense, use simple structure 'I had... and I liked it. Now I like...' and use natural collocations 'on weekends' and 'my bike'.

× I think Umm, it's getting popular more and more because of the share bike we have in Seoul city.

✓ I think it's becoming more and more popular because of the shared bikes we have in Seoul.

6: Present tense issue — 'it's getting popular more and more' is awkward; 'becoming more and more popular' is natural. 13: Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs — word order 'popular more and more' should be 'more and more popular'. 14/11: Quantifier/article/preposition — 'the share bike' is incorrect; use 'shared bikes' (adjective form) and plural to match general reference. Remove 'city' after 'Seoul' (unnecessary). Suggestions: Use 'becoming' or 'getting' with correct word order ('more and more popular'), use 'shared bikes' and plural for general systems, and say 'in Seoul' not 'in Seoul city'.

× Umm, it's called the Tardani.

✓ Umm, it's called Tardi or it's called the Tardani service.

13/22: Incorrect use of adjectives/articles and word form — 'the Tardani' may be a proper name but is unclear; if the service name is 'Tardi' use that, or say 'the Tardani service'. Suggestion: Use correct proper name or add 'service' after the name when using 'the'. Ensure accurate spelling of the service name. (If the real name is 'Tardi', say 'called Tardi'. If it's 'Tardani' as a brand, say 'the Tardani service'.)

× So basically we can borrow, uh, one or two hours and we can ride in Han Rivers or umm, the lake.

✓ Basically we can borrow a bike for one or two hours and ride along the Han River or at the lake.

8: Verb + -ing form / 11: Incorrect use of prepositions — 'borrow, uh, one or two hours' is incorrect; you borrow an object and specify duration with 'for one or two hours'. 1/22: Singular and article errors — 'Han Rivers' should be 'Han River' (singular) or 'the Han River'; 'the lake' is vague but acceptable as 'the lake'. 10/6: Present tense/participle — better to say 'ride along the Han River' or 'ride by the lake'. Suggestions: Use 'borrow a bike for [duration]' and 'ride along the Han River' or 'at the lake'. Ensure correct singular form 'Han River' and include 'a' before 'bike'.