自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Tổng quan: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, động từ chia, động từ bất quy tắc), phát âm/ngắt nghỉ và độ mạch lạc. Cụ thể: sửa lỗi thì (từ hiện tại/ quá khứ), loại bỏ từ không cần thiết (um, I want...), và dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng. Nên sử dụng tối đa 3-4 câu, mỗi câu rõ ràng. Ví dụ các điểm cần sửa: ‘I wanted a motorcycle when I was growing up’ thay vì ‘I want to have… when I when I grow up’; ‘I started practicing on a bicycle’ thay vì ‘I have start practice with a bike’; ‘I begged my parents to buy me a bike’ thay vì ‘I had begging my parents to bought me a bike’. Thêm liên kết logic nếu cần giải thích lý do (for example, so that...).

示例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I wanted a motorcycle when I grew up, so I started practising riding on my bike to gain confidence. I begged my parents to buy me one, and they finally agreed when they saw I was responsible.

建议: Tổng quan: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, số ít/số nhiều, và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng. Nên bắt đầu với câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó đưa vài chi tiết cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn. Sửa các lỗi như ‘everybody are go’ → ‘most people go’, ‘in Vietnam's is don't have any lands for biker’ → ‘there aren’t many places for cyclists’. Có thể dùng linking words như ‘because’ và ‘for example’ để mạch lạc. Tránh lặp từ 'Vietnam' quá nhiều; thay bằng 'my country' hoặc 'here'.

示例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes or cars because they are faster and more convenient. For example, there are few dedicated bike lanes or parking areas, so cycling is less common in cities.

× Absolutely yes. Umm I want to have a motorcycle when I when I grow up so I have start practice with a bike.

✓ Absolutely, yes. Umm, I wanted to have a motorcycle when I was growing up, so I started practicing with a bike.

Sentence mixes present and past incorrectly. The student is answering a past-tense question ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?') so verbs referring to that time should be past tense. Change 'want' to 'wanted', 'when I grow up' to 'when I was growing up', 'have start practice' to 'started practicing'. Also use 'practicing with a bike' for correct verb form. Suggestion: keep temporal reference consistent (use past tense for childhood) and use correct past verb forms and -ing for continuous actions.

× I had begging my parents to bought me a bike so that I can break this with it.

✓ I had been begging my parents to buy me a bike so that I could ride it.

Multiple tense and verb-form errors. 'I had begging' is incorrect; use past perfect progressive 'I had been begging' if emphasizing duration, or simple past 'I begged'. 'Bought' should be the base form after 'to' (infinitive): 'to buy'. 'So that I can break this with it' is incorrect vocabulary and structure. Likely intended 'ride it' and backshifts 'can' to 'could' to match past context. Suggestion: use correct verb forms after 'to', use appropriate past modal 'could', and choose correct verb 'ride' for bikes.

× I don't think bikes are popular in my country because in Vietnam everybody are go with motorbike or car.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because in Vietnam everybody goes by motorbike or car.

Subject-verb agreement and verb choice errors. 'Everybody' is singular and requires singular verb 'goes', not 'are go'. Use the correct preposition 'by' when talking about modes of transport: 'go by motorbike or car'. Suggestion: match verb form to singular indefinite pronouns and use 'go by' for transportation.

× Bike is not very usual in Vietnam because in Vietnam's is don't have any lands for biker.

✓ Bikes are not very common in Vietnam because we don't have many places for bikers.

Several problems: article and singular/plural ('Bike is' should be 'Bikes are' or 'A bike is'), word choice ('usual' -> 'common'), incorrect possessive 'Vietnam's is', and incorrect negation 'don't have any lands' and noun choice 'lands' and 'biker'. Use 'we don't have many places' or 'there aren't many areas' and plural 'bikers'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements, correct collocations ('common', 'places for bikers'), and proper negation structure.