自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and directly responds to the question with a topic sentence and a brief detail (colour). To improve, make it slightly longer (up to 3–4 short sentences), add a linking word and a specific supporting detail (where you rode it or who gave it to you). This will sound more natural and give the examiner more evidence of fluency and coherence.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; it was bright red. I remember riding it around my neighbourhood every afternoon, and my older brother taught me how to balance. It was my favourite way to get exercise and meet friends.

建议: Your main idea is clear but the answer has grammatical errors, awkward phrasing and repetition. To improve: (1) correct grammar (e.g., “used to transport their things”), (2) use linking words to organize points (for example, ‘Firstly’, ‘Also’, ‘For example’), (3) give specific examples or comparisons (types of bikes, regions where cycling is common) and avoid repeating the same word. Aim for 3–4 concise sentences with varied vocabulary.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Kenya. Firstly, many people use bicycles to carry goods and travel short distances in towns and villages. Also, cycling is common for leisure and sport — for example, there are local races and weekend group rides in Nairobi.

× People used to transport her their things.

✓ People used to transport their things on them.

The original sentence uses the pronoun 'her' incorrectly and creates unclear meaning. Likely intent is that people carried their belongings on bicycles. Replace 'her' with a clear referent or restructure the sentence. Suggested phrasing 'transport their things on them' clarifies that 'them' refers to bikes. Also ensure plural agreement between 'people' and 'their.'

× They're used also for leisure and also for activities like riding, race.

✓ They are also used for leisure and activities such as riding and racing.

The original sentence has awkward word order and incorrect noun form 'race' after 'activities like.' Use parallel structure and correct noun/verb forms: 'riding and racing' or 'riding and races.' Move 'also' to a natural position ('are also used') and replace 'like' with 'such as' for examples. This makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.