自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by using a concise topic sentence, avoiding repetition, and adding one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also keep the answer within 3–4 sentences and remove filler words.

示例: I didn’t have my own bike as a child, but I often borrowed a neighbor’s to ride with my friends. For example, we would cycle to the small park near our houses every weekend, which was a highlight of my childhood.

建议: Your main idea is good but the answer contains hesitations, repetition, and some unclear phrases. Improve by stating a clear topic sentence, using linking words (e.g., because, for example), and giving a specific reason or example. Remove filler sounds and avoid repeating the same phrase.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many students use them to commute to school. For instance, in my town most teenagers ride bicycles every morning to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× 'I usually borrowed my neighborhood's bike to ride around my neighborhood with my friends, which is so funny and memorable.'

✓ 'I usually borrowed my neighbor's bike to ride around the neighborhood with my friends, which was very funny and memorable.'

'Which is so funny and memorable' is inconsistent in tense with the past context ('when I was a child, I didn't have... I usually borrowed'). Change 'is' to past 'was' to match past narration. Also 'my neighborhood's bike' is awkward; use 'my neighbor's bike' or 'a bike from my neighborhood' and avoid repeating "my neighborhood". Use 'very' instead of 'so' for more natural formal expression.'},{