自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid filler phrases like “actually” and “and that's it.” Keep under five sentences and show a bit more reflection (e.g., how that shaped your interests).

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I spent most of my free time playing football with my friends, so I never developed an interest in cycling. As a result, cycling is not one of my hobbies now.

建议: Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'however'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'few people ride them') and avoid repetition. Include a short example or comparison to support your point.

示例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. This is because most people prefer cars or motorcycles for commuting due to speed and convenience; for example, many workers travel long distances where a bike would be impractical. However, some people use bikes for short trips or exercise.

× No, actually, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I spent most of my time playing football with my friend.

✓ No, actually, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I spent most of my time playing football with my friends.

The original sentence uses 'my friend' which implies a single person, but context ('spent most of my time playing football') typically involves multiple people; more natural is 'my friends'. This is a pluralization/word-choice issue related to past-tense narration; change to 'friends' for grammatical and idiomatic correctness. Suggestion: use 'friends' when referring to multiple playmates or keep 'my friend' only if you mean one specific person and adjust context accordingly.

× So I think cycling, actually, it's not my favorite hobby.

✓ So I think cycling is actually not my favorite hobby.

The original contains an unnecessary comma and an extra subject 'it' creating a fragmented structure. Remove the redundant 'it' and reposition 'actually' for a natural sentence: 'cycling is actually not my favorite hobby.' This corrects sentence structure and word order.

× I don't think so, because in my country people used to work on their feet, ride their cars, ride their motorcycles.

✓ I don't think so, because in my country people usually walk to work or drive cars and ride motorcycles.

'Used to' suggests a past habitual action; the question asks about current popularity, so present-tense wording is required. 'Work on their feet' is awkward; use 'walk to work' or 'work on foot'. Also combine 'drive cars' and 'ride motorcycles' for parallel structure. Suggestion: use present simple 'usually' for typical current behaviour.

× But bikes few people like like to ride them.

✓ But few people like to ride bikes.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and a duplicated word 'like'. The natural structure is 'few people like to ride bikes' or 'bikes are liked by few people.' Remove the extra 'like' and reorder to Subject + Verb + Object for clarity. Suggestion: prefer 'few people like to ride bikes' to express low popularity.