自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and clarity, use past tense consistently, correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Limit to 3–4 sentences and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'rode' instead of 'wrote').

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me when I was about six or seven, and I loved riding it. I rode it every morning and evening to explore the neighborhood and play with my friends.

建议: Make a clear, structured response: state your opinion in one sentence, then support it with specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'however'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'depends on the place', 'students need them', 'many people do not because it is hot'). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like 'umm'.

示例: I think bikes are popular only in certain places. For example, many students use bikes to move between university buildings because it is convenient, but most other people do not cycle much because Thailand is very hot.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child). The student used present tense 'have' but should use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when talking about past events (e.g., 'I had a bike').

× When I were a child my father gave me when I was maybe 6 or 7 years old and I really love it.

✓ When I was a child my father gave me one when I was maybe 6 or 7 years old and I really loved it.

Multiple issues: 'were' should be 'was' for first-person singular in past (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'gave me when' is missing the object; add 'one' to clarify. 'Really love' should be past tense 'really loved' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement ('I was'), include necessary objects ('one'), and keep verb tenses consistent when describing past events.

× I wrote it in in every day, in the morning and evening.

✓ I rode it every day, in the morning and evening.

The student used 'wrote' (past of 'write') incorrectly; the intended verb is 'ride'. Also 'in in' is a duplication error. Use the correct past form 'rode' to describe habitual past action. Suggestion: choose correct verbs for actions (ride → rode) and avoid duplicate words.

× Well I think it's depend on the pace.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the place.

Two errors: 'depend' needs third-person singular '-s' because the subject is 'it' (present simple: 'it depends'). 'Pace' is likely a wrong word choice for 'place'. Suggestion: for present simple with he/she/it add 's' to the verb and check word choice ('place' instead of 'pace').

× I think for the university or the school it's still popular because umm transfer to every building for a study the no the student needs it but in normal people is not because it's quite hot in Thailand.

✓ I think for university or school it is still popular because students use bikes to get to different buildings for study, but for ordinary people it is not popular because it is quite hot in Thailand.

This sentence has multiple structural and grammar issues: missing articles/word order ('for university or school' instead of 'for the university or the school'), unclear verb phrase ('transfer to every building for a study' should be 'use bikes to get to different buildings for study'), incorrect insertion 'the no', missing subject-verb agreement ('the student needs it' → 'students use them' or 'students need them'), and 'in normal people is not' should be 'for ordinary people it is not popular'. Also maintain consistent present tense. Suggestion: break complex ideas into clearer clauses, use correct articles, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose natural vocabulary like 'students', 'use bikes to get to', and 'ordinary people'.