自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng về thì và cấu trúc hơn (dùng quá khứ cho sự kiện trong quá khứ). Hạn chế lặp từ và sắp xếp ý theo thứ tự logic: nêu chủ đề, mô tả ngắn, lý do/hoàn cảnh. Thêm liên từ để mạch lạc và chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tuổi khi nhận, cảm xúc hoặc kỷ niệm).

示例: Yes, I had a beautiful pink bike that my father gave me when I was in primary school. He gave it to me as a reward for winning an English prize, and I remember feeling very proud and excited to ride it around the neighborhood.

建议: Cần sửa phát âm và lỗi chính tả ('buys' nên là 'bikes') và giảm tiếng ờ/um. Trả lời thẳng trước rồi cung cấp lý do với từ liên kết (for example, because, so). Nên đưa thêm so sánh hoặc phạm vi (ví dụ: ở thành thị hay nông thôn) để cụ thể hóa ý.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially among older people. For example, I often see many people over 60 cycling in the park every afternoon, while younger people tend to prefer motorbikes or cars in the city.

× Yes, I have a beautiful pink bike that my father gave me to encourage me, to encourage me when I win, when I want the English prize or when I was at primary school.

✓ Yes, I had a beautiful pink bike that my father gave me to encourage me when I won an English prize at primary school.

The student is describing a past situation, so verbs should be in the past tense. 'I have' should be 'I had' to match 'gave me' and 'was at primary school'. 'When I win/when I want' are present-tense forms and should be past: 'when I won' or 'when I wanted'. Also 'the English prize' is more natural as 'an English prize' here. Suggestions: Use consistent past tense for past events; simplify repeated phrases and remove redundancy.

× Uh, I think buys is popular for older people because I can see lots of, uh, lots of individuals who are over 60 years old, umm, biking around the park every, uh, afternoon, umm.

✓ Uh, I think bikes are popular with older people because I can see lots of people over 60 biking around the park every afternoon.

The learner used 'buys' (a misspelling) and incorrect verb form 'is' with a plural subject. Correct plural noun is 'bikes' and the correct verb form is 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Also use 'popular with' rather than 'popular for' in this context and 'individuals' can be simplified to 'people'. Remove filler and repeated words for clarity. Suggestions: Check spelling, ensure subject and verb agree in number, and use natural prepositions ('popular with').