自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with tense and repetition. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, avoid repeating words, and add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, how you used it, or who taught you) using a linking word. Keep answers natural and under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I did — I had a small red bicycle when I was a child. My mother bought it for my seventh birthday, and I rode it every day around the neighborhood until I was about twelve. Because it had training wheels at first, I learned to balance gradually, which made me feel very confident.

建议: Give a more detailed, specific reason and use linking words to connect ideas. State your opinion clearly, then support it with examples or comparisons (e.g., commuting, exercise, cost). Avoid vague phrasing like "so many" without specifics.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For instance, many people use bicycles to commute to work and school because they are cheaper and faster in busy cities; additionally, cycling is a common form of exercise and leisure, especially on weekends.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about possession 'when you were a child', so the past tense should be used. Using present tense 'have' is inconsistent with the time frame. Change to 'had' to match past context and maintain correct temporal reference.

× When I was a child my mom brought brought it to me.

✓ When I was a child my mom brought it to me.

The verb is correctly in the past tense 'brought' but the word is duplicated. Remove the repeated word to fix the sentence. Also consider adding a comma after 'child' for clarity: 'When I was a child, my mom brought it to me.'

× Yes, it's so popular because I see so many people riding bikes here.

✓ Yes, they're very popular because I see so many people riding bikes here.

The question asks about bikes in general in the country; the plural subject 'bikes' requires a plural pronoun and agreement. 'It's' (it is) is singular and refers to one item; use 'they're' (they are) to agree with the plural noun 'bikes'. Also 'so popular' is conversationally acceptable but 'very popular' is slightly more natural in this context.