自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Shorten and correct grammar, give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention time frames and specific examples to make it natural and coherent. Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I never learned to ride. Instead, I usually walked to school every day and sometimes went to the market with my family on weekends. As a result, I became very used to walking and public transport.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific reasons with linking words and a precise example. Correct minor grammar and avoid starting sentences with 'And'. Use varied vocabulary like 'commonly' or 'widely used'.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for short journeys to avoid traffic and because they are much cheaper than motorcycles. Moreover, cycling is a common leisure activity at weekends, especially among students and delivery workers who cycle long distances.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was child because I couldn't learn how to ride one.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I couldn't learn how to ride one.

The noun 'child' needs the indefinite article 'a' in the phrase 'when I was a child'. Omission of the article is incorrect in English for this countable noun. Suggestion: use 'a child' or rephrase as 'when I was young'.

× I usually walk to school and sometime I went to the market with my family and friends.

✓ I usually walked to school and sometimes I went to the market with my family and friends.

The student mixes present and past tenses. The question asks about childhood (past), so habitual actions in the past should use the past tense 'walked' and the adverb should be 'sometimes' (plural form). Also 'sometime' means 'at an unspecified time' and is incorrect here. Suggestion: keep tense consistent by using past tense for habits: 'I usually walked... and sometimes I went...'.

× Many people use them for short journeys to avoid traffic and because they are cheaper than motor bicycles.

✓ Many people use them for short journeys to avoid traffic and because they are cheaper than motorbikes.

The phrase 'motor bicycles' is unnatural; the correct common noun is 'motorbikes' or 'motorcycles'. No definite article issue per se, but wording choice is wrong. Suggestion: use 'motorbikes' or 'motorcycles'.

× And cycling is a common leisure activity, for example at weekends, students and delivery workers.

✓ Cycling is a common leisure activity; for example, at weekends students and delivery workers often cycle.

The original sentence is a fragment and has poor structure: the example clause lacks a verb, making it unclear. Rewriting adds a verb 'often cycle' and fixes punctuation. Suggestion: provide a complete clause after 'for example'.