自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、時制や語順の間違いがあり、語彙と結びつけ表現が単純です。具体的には「do have」ではなく過去について話すので過去形を使い、冗長な繰り返しを避けて一貫した短めの文を使うと自然になります。また、もう一つか二つの具体的な詳細（どんな色だったか、どのくらい練習したか等）を接続詞でつなげて加えると説得力が増します。発音や流暢さも向上させるため、短いまとまりで話す練習をしましょう。

示例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bicycle when I was three, and I used to ride it in the park every day. Because it had training wheels at first, I felt confident and improved quickly.

建议: 内容は良いですが、口語の「like」を多用しており、文が断片的で冗長です。一般的な事実を述べる時は現在形を保ち、根拠や割合などの具体例を一つ加えると説得力が増します。接続詞（for example, because）や割合表現（almost everyone, most students）を使って文を滑らかにつなげましょう。また、同じ語彙の繰り返しを避け、シノニム（commute, travel）を使う練習をしてください。

示例: Yes, bicycles are very popular, especially among high school students. For example, at my school almost everyone commutes by bike because it is cheap and convenient.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about possession in the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Use 'had' instead of 'do have' to match the time reference: 'Yes, I had a bike.' Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time expression; when referring to childhood, use past simple verbs.

× When I was child, I got a bicycle.

✓ When I was a child, I got a bicycle.

The phrase 'when I was child' is missing the article 'a' before 'child'. English requires an article here: 'a child.' Suggestion: Use 'a' with singular countable nouns when referring nonspecifically: 'a child.'

× When I was three years old, my parents got me one and then I was so happy so I rolled it like every single day.

✓ When I was three years old, my parents bought me one and I was so happy that I rode it every single day.

'Got' can mean received but 'bought' is clearer for purchasing; 'rolled' is incorrect for riding a bicycle — use 'rode' (past tense of 'ride'). Also 'so happy so I' is ungrammatical; use 'so happy that I' to connect clauses. Maintain past simple throughout. Suggestion: Use 'bought' for purchase, 'rode' for using a bike, and link cause/result with 'that'.

× Yes, it's really popular in my country, especially for all the high school students.

✓ Yes, they're really popular in my country, especially among high school students.

The student refers to 'bikes' (plural) so use a plural pronoun or noun 'they're' or 'bicycles are'. Also use 'among' (or 'with') instead of 'for' to indicate a group's usage. 'All the high school students' is awkward; 'high school students' is more natural. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun/verb number matches the noun and use 'among' to express prevalence within a group.

× Like in my high school.

✓ For example, at my high school,

This fragment 'Like in my high school.' is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb and is informal. Replace with a full clause such as 'For example, at my high school,' and connect to the next clause. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; use complete clauses and appropriate linking phrases.

× Like almost like everyone came to high school by bike.

✓ Almost everyone came to school by bike.

The phrase repeats 'like' unnecessarily and 'came to high school' is wordy; 'came to school' is sufficient. Also 'came' is correct past tense to match context. Remove filler 'like'. Suggestion: Eliminate redundant fillers ('like') and use concise phrasing: 'Almost everyone came to school by bike.'