自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (age, who gave it, how you felt). Use linking words for coherence and keep to 2–3 short sentences. For example, say when you got the bike, who gave it to you, and one brief memory of learning to ride.

示例: Yes. I got my first bike when I was twelve; my uncle gave it to me as a birthday present. I remember being excited and spending afternoons practicing in the park until I could ride without help.

建议: Answer directly and give specific reasons with linking words. Start with a clear opinion, then provide 2 clear reasons (e.g., affordability, convenience) and a brief example. Avoid filler words and repeat vocabulary; use synonyms for clarity.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to maintain. For example, many people use them to commute short distances or run errands, especially in crowded cities where cars are less practical.

× Eh yes Sir I started bike my day.

✓ Yes, sir. I started riding a bike when I was young.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing verbs/particles. 'Started bike my day' is ungrammatical. Use 'started riding a bike' to show the action and 'when I was young' or specific age to indicate time. Also add appropriate punctuation and capitalization. Suggestion: place verb 'started' before the gerund 'riding' and include an object 'a bike'.

× I 12 year old gifted by my uncle and my twelve 12th 12th body gifted me.

✓ I was 12 years old when my uncle gifted me a bike.

This sentence has missing auxiliary verb 'was', incorrect noun form 'year' should be plural 'years', and wrong word order for passive construction. 'Gifted by my uncle' should be rephrased to active or correct passive with subject: 'I was gifted a bike by my uncle' or 'my uncle gifted me a bike'. Avoid repeating numbers. Suggestion: include a past-tense auxiliary 'was' and pluralize 'years'.

× Uh, many practice in mostly like people's bike.

✓ Uh, many people in my country practice riding bikes and like them.

Original has incorrect word order and unclear noun phrase 'people's bike'. 'Many practice in mostly like people's bike' should be restructured: 'many people practice riding bikes' or 'many people use bikes'. Clarify subject 'many people' and verb 'practice' followed by gerund 'riding'.

× So one people is, uh, going easily and outside and, uh, outside and it is a low budget in, uh.

✓ So people can travel easily and outdoors, and it is low cost.

This sentence uses singular 'one people' (incorrect) and awkward repetition 'outside and outside'. 'Going easily and outside' should be 'travel easily and outdoors'. 'Low budget' is not used about objects; use 'low cost' or 'inexpensive'. Suggestion: use plural subject 'people', correct verb phrase 'can travel easily', and use 'low cost' or 'inexpensive' to describe affordability.