自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations, repeated words, and grammar errors (e.g., ‘I was good at riding a bike’ not ‘in good at biking’). Use linking words like ‘because’ to connect reasons.

示例: Yes, I did. I was quite good at riding a bike when I was young because I practiced every day with my friends. For example, I often rode to the park and learned to balance and change gears, so I became confident quickly.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a brief comparison. Correct vocabulary (bikes, played) and grammar (in the past bikes played an important role). Use linking words such as ‘however’ or ‘nowadays’ to show contrast.

示例: In my country, bicycles used to be very common, but nowadays they are less popular. In the past, many people used bikes for short trips and commuting; however, because motorbikes and cars are faster and more convenient, most people prefer them today.

× Well, actually when I was little, I was in good at biking.

✓ Well, actually when I was little, I was not good at biking.

The phrase 'in good at' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'not good at' to indicate lack of ability. Use the adjective 'good' with the preposition 'at' and include 'not' to show the negative. Suggestion: say 'I was not good at biking.'

× I, I mean riding a bike.

✓ I mean riding a bike.

The repetition 'I, I' is a speech disfluency; grammatically the clause should be 'I mean riding a bike.' Keep a single subject and the gerund 'riding' is correct after 'mean.' Suggestion: remove the duplicate 'I.'

× So, you know, I didn't want to like, I didn't want my parents, uh, buy for me a bike.

✓ So, you know, I didn't want my parents to buy me a bike.

After 'want' followed by an object ('my parents'), the correct structure is 'want someone to do something.' The original incorrectly uses 'buy for me' and an extra 'like.' Use 'to buy me a bike.' Suggestion: 'I didn't want my parents to buy me a bike.'

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bicycles are popular in your country?

The word 'bikes' is informal but not incorrect; suggested correction is stylistic. If treating as grammar, no change is required. This suggestion uses 'bicycles' for formality. Suggestion: use 'bicycles' in formal speech.

× Umm, well, in the past, bias was, I mean play an important role in, you know, residents, uh, lives,

✓ Umm, well, in the past, bikes played an important role in residents' lives,

Multiple issues: 'bias' is a misspelling of 'bikes'; 'was play' is ungrammatical—use past tense 'played' to match 'in the past'; possessive for 'residents' lives' needs an apostrophe. Suggestion: 'bikes played an important role in residents' lives.'

× but uh, in the, at the present, Vietnamese people prefer riding umm, motorbike or cars.

✓ but at present Vietnamese people prefer riding motorbikes or cars.

Use 'at present' (no 'the') and parallel plural nouns: 'motorbikes or cars.' Also 'prefer riding motorbikes' is fine; ensure plural agreement. Suggestion: 'at present Vietnamese people prefer riding motorbikes or driving cars.'