自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and use past tense for childhood. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar (e.g., "I didn't have" not "I don't have").

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. One reason was safety: my parents thought riding on busy roads was dangerous, and also I was too young to ride without supervision.

建议: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "also"). Use plural forms and avoid repetition. Give one or two concrete examples of how bikes are used.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical. For example, many middle-class families own at least one motorcycle for commuting to work and for deliveries, and people often use them to run errands or travel short distances.

× No, I don't have a bike because in in childhood bike is not safe and I don't have a license.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because when I was a child bikes were not safe and I didn't have a license.

ID 6: The student uses present tense ('don't have', 'is', 'don't have') while the question asks about the past ('when you were a child'). Use past tense verbs to match the time frame: 'didn't have' and 'didn't have a license'. Also change 'in childhood' to 'when I was a child' for natural phrasing, and use plural 'bikes were not safe' because we refer to bikes in general.

× That's why I don't have a bike.

✓ That's why I didn't have a bike.

ID 26: This sentence is logically connected to a past situation, so it should use past tense ('didn't have'). Keep tense consistent across sentences describing the same timeframe.

× Yes, bike is very popular in my country because in average middle class people have a have only bike and bike is very very common.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because on average middle-class people often have only a bike and bikes are very common.

ID 1: Use plural 'bikes' when speaking about general popularity. Also correct 'in average' to 'on average' and 'middle class' to 'middle-class' (compound adjective). Remove the duplicated 'have a have'. Ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subject: 'bikes are'.

× because in average middle class people have a have only bike

✓ because on average middle-class people often have only a bike

ID 11: Use 'on average' instead of 'in average'. Also add 'often' for natural phrasing and correct 'middle-class' as a compound adjective before 'people'.

× Very common vehicle, home to home, home to home, deliver and go to office and etcetera.

✓ They are a very common means of transport used for going from home to home, making deliveries, and commuting to the office.

ID 26: The original is a fragmentary list with repetition and unclear nouns. Provide a complete sentence with a subject and verb ('They are') and parallel list items ('going from home to home, making deliveries, and commuting to the office'). Replace vague 'vehicle' with 'means of transport' for clarity.