自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tense, articles, and countable nouns) and avoid filler phrases like “as far as I could remember.”

示例: I didn't have my own bike as a child. My family couldn't afford one, so I usually borrowed a classmate's bike to ride to the park. Because I borrowed a bike, I learned to ride but had fewer chances to practice regularly.

建议: Give a clear direct opinion first, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid fillers (“uh”) and finish sentences fully. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘commute’, ‘cost-effective’, ‘environmentally friendly’).

示例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country. For example, many people now commute by bike because it is cheaper and faster in congested cities, and cycling is also promoted as an environmentally friendly option.

× As far as I could remember, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child because my family is not that rich and I just use a bike when I have to borrow 1 from my classmate.

✓ As far as I can remember, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child because my family was not that rich and I only used a bike when I had to borrow one from a classmate.

Mixed tense and number errors: 'As far as I could remember' should be present perfect phrase 'As far as I can remember' for a general memory. 'is not that rich' refers to past situation so should be 'was not that rich'. 'I just use' and 'when I have to borrow' are present tense but context is past, so use past 'I only used' and 'when I had to borrow'. Use the word 'one' rather than numeral '1'. Suggestions: keep all verbs for the same time frame (past) and use words instead of numerals in sentences.

× From there it is the only way that I could experience riding a bike.

✓ From there it was the only way that I could experience riding a bike.

Tense inconsistency: 'it is' is present but surrounding context is past, so change to 'it was'. The gerund 'riding' is correct to express experience. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistency when describing past experiences.

× As of now, uh, there are some people who are using bikes and they prefer to use bikes from their home to, to their workplace.

✓ As of now, there are some people who use bikes and prefer to ride them from their home to their workplace.

Awkward progressive 'are using' is unnecessary for habitual action; simple present 'use' is better. Repetition 'prefer to use bikes' can be simplified to 'prefer to ride them'. Suggestion: use simple present for general habits and avoid redundant phrases.

× And it, I think it became more popular now than it used to be before and, uh, it's economically.

✓ I think bikes have become more popular now than they used to be before, and they are economical.

Tense and phrasing errors: 'I think it became more popular now' mixes past 'became' with 'now'; use present perfect 'have become' to link past change to present. 'It' is unclear; use 'bikes' or 'they'. 'It's economically' is incorrect adjective/adverb use; use 'they are economical' or 'they are economical to use'. Suggestion: use present perfect for changes over time and pair correct adjective forms.