自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Focus on clarity and grammar: give a direct topic sentence, then 1–2 clear supporting details in complete sentences. Mention who bought the bike, how you used it, and a simple time reference. Use correct tense and avoid fragments. For example, say you had a bike, your parents bought it for you, you used it to go to school or ride with family, and explain briefly why you liked it.

示例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bicycle when I was about eight years old, and I used it to ride to school and around the neighborhood. I often rode with my family on weekends, which made it a special memory for me.

建议: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and specific supporting details, using correct grammar and linking words. State your opinion first, then give a brief historical reason and a contrast or current situation if possible. Use linking words like ‘because’, ‘however’, or ‘for example’ to make your answer coherent.

示例: Yes, I think bicycles were very popular in China, especially from the 1970s to the 1990s because they were affordable and convenient for daily commuting. However, in recent years many people prefer cars and public transport, so bike usage in cities has decreased compared with that period.

× Yes, of course I have a boy.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bicycle.

The student used the wrong noun and tense. The question asked about having a bike in childhood, so past tense 'had' is required (Grammar Problem Type 5 or 6), and 'boy' is incorrect noun choice. Use 'bicycle' to match meaning and 'had' for past possession. Suggestion: replace 'have a boy' with 'had a bicycle.'

× When I was young, my parents.

✓ When I was young, my parents bought it for me.

This fragment lacks a main verb and completes thought (Grammar Problem Type 23 and 26). The student likely intended to say parents bought the bike. Provide a full clause with past tense verb 'bought.' Suggestion: always include subject + verb + object to form a complete sentence.

× Really nice buy for me.

✓ They bought it for me as a really nice gift.

The phrase is ungrammatical and omits a subject and correct noun choice (Grammar Problem Types 26 and 13). 'Buy' is a verb; here a noun like 'gift' or a verbal phrase 'bought it' is needed. Use past tense 'bought' and add 'gift' to clarify meaning. Suggestion: convert fragment into a full clause with appropriate noun.

× I go to school 15.

✓ I rode it to school every day when I was 15.

This sentence is unclear and missing tense and preposition (Grammar Problem Types 6 and 11). '15' alone is ambiguous; likely meant 'when I was 15' or 'for 15 years.' Use past tense 'rode' and include time expression 'when I was 15.' Suggestion: specify time phrases clearly and match verb tense.

× With my family, so I like.

✓ I often rode with my family, so I enjoyed it.

This fragment lacks proper clause structure and tense agreement (Grammar Problem Types 26 and 6). 'With my family' is a prepositional phrase needing a main clause; 'so I like' should be past tense 'I enjoyed it' to match past context. Suggestion: combine phrases into a complete sentence and keep tense consistent.

× Yes of course I'm Chinese and our country in last century 70s to 90's the bike is the most popular transport in our country and everybody go to work, go to school and travel the city by by.

✓ Yes, of course I'm Chinese. In our country from the 1970s to the 1990s, the bicycle was the most popular means of transport, and everybody went to work, went to school, and traveled around the city by bicycle.

Multiple errors: tense should be past ('was', 'went', 'traveled') to describe past decades (Grammar Problem Type 5), decade formatting needs '1970s to the 1990s', and subject-verb agreement requires third person singular/past plural forms (Grammar Problem Types 2 and 27). Also word choice: 'bicycle' and 'means of transport' are clearer than 'by by.' Suggestion: use past tense for historical statements, correct decade expressions, ensure verbs agree with subjects, and choose correct nouns ('bicycle', 'traveled').