自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, grammatically accurate, and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., "didn't", "my parents felt"), avoid repetition, and keep the response to no more than 3–4 short sentences. Use a linking phrase for clarity (e.g., "because" or "so").

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents felt that it was dangerous for girls because they could get injured, so they preferred I avoid cycling. For that reason I never learned to ride.

建议: Answer directly and avoid unnecessary repetition or broad generalizations. Begin with a clear opinion, then provide one specific reason and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., "I was raised by African parents," "would make you seem unserious"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

示例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many parents prefer children to focus on studying rather than outdoor activities because they worry cycling is risky and distracts from school. As a result, fewer children learn to ride bikes.

× No I didn't growing up.

✓ No, I didn't have one growing up.

The original sentence omits the main verb for past tense. 'Didn't' requires a base-form verb after it. Add 'have one' to show possession in the past. Also add a comma after 'No' for natural pacing.

× My parents feels that a a female child is not supposed to have a bike because you can get injured and as a female or a female child having a smooth skin is good.

✓ My parents feel that a female child is not supposed to have a bike because you can get injured, and that as a female child it is better to have smooth skin.

'Parents' is plural, so the verb must be 'feel' not 'feels' (subject-verb agreement). Remove the duplicated 'a' and redundant phrases. Split the run-on sentence with a comma and revise the second clause to use a clear subject and predicate ('it is better') for grammatical correctness and clarity.

× My parents feels that a a female child is not supposed to have a bike because you can get injured and as a female or a female child having a smooth skin is good.

✓ My parents feel that a female child is not supposed to have a bike because you can get injured, and that as a female child it is better to have smooth skin.

There was a duplicated indefinite article 'a a' which is incorrect. Also 'a female child' is the appropriate article use; 'smooth skin' does not need 'a' before it because 'skin' is uncountable. Correcting articles improves grammaticality and naturalness.

× My parents feels that a a female child is not supposed to have a bike because you can get injured and as a female or a female child having a smooth skin is good.

✓ My parents feel that a female child is not supposed to have a bike because she can get injured, and that as a female child it is better to have smooth skin.

The original uses 'you' which is vague in this context; using 'she' clearly refers to 'a female child.' Replacing 'you' with the appropriate pronoun improves referent clarity.

× No, I don't think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ No, I don't think bikes are popular in my country.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present tense 'don't think' matches the current opinion, so no change needed.

× I am an African and an African parent raised me.

✓ I am African, and African parents raised me.

'An African' is acceptable, but 'an African parent raised me' is singular and inconsistent with meaning. If the intent is to state cultural background, 'I am African' is natural. If referring to upbringing by multiple parents, use 'African parents raised me.' Also remove the unnecessary article before 'African' when used as an adjective.

× My African parents believed that having a bike as a child would make you unserious, so and that and I think that goes for every African parents too.

✓ My African parents believed that having a bike as a child would make you seem unserious, and I think that applies to many African parents too.

The phrase 'make you unserious' is awkward; use 'make you seem unserious.' Remove the extra conjunctions 'so and that and' to avoid a run-on. Also 'every African parents' mixes singular 'every' with plural 'parents'; use 'many African parents' or 'African parents' for agreement.