自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Keep answers clear, grammatically correct, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct past tense and verb errors (e.g., 'my father bought it', not 'that's my father bought it'). Use linking words like 'and' or 'so' to connect ideas, and avoid irrelevant or unclear words. Also correct vocabulary: use 'rode' or 'ride' instead of 'write'.

示例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bicycle for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it every evening with my neighbours. I especially enjoyed racing along the park path because it felt freeing and helped me make friends.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'also'). Avoid filler sounds ('umm', 'uh') and unclear words ('passport' here is incorrect). Use precise vocabulary: say 'bike lanes' or 'cycling infrastructure' instead of 'passport'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences maximum.

示例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because the streets are often crowded and unsafe for cycling. Also, there are few dedicated bike lanes and many people cannot afford high-quality bikes, so most prefer motorbikes or public transport.

× Yes I did, I had a bike and that's my father bought it for my 7th birthday.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike, and my father bought it for my 7th birthday.

Incorrect verb phrase 'that's my father bought' mixes present contraction 'that’s' with past tense 'bought'. This is a past simple statement, so use 'my father bought' without 'that's'. Also add punctuation and a comma after 'Yes' for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and separate clauses with appropriate punctuation.

× I yesterday to write my bike every evening with my neighbors and I really enjoyed writing.

✓ Yesterday I used to ride my bike every evening with my neighbors, and I really enjoyed riding.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms 'to write' and 'writing' instead of the correct gerund/past habit forms. For a past habitual action use 'used to ride' or simple past 'rode'. 'Riding' is the correct -ing form for enjoyment. Also move 'yesterday' to the beginning or use 'when I was a child' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'used to ride' for habitual past or 'rode' for simple past, and 'riding' after 'enjoyed'.

× I don't think so because umm, our streets are uh, very crowded and people, uh, uh, can't afford to umm, buy a good bicycle.

✓ I don't think so because our streets are very crowded and people can't afford to buy a good bicycle.

The sentence contains filler words but grammatically is mostly present tense and acceptable. Removal of fillers 'umm' and repeated 'uh' improves clarity. No tense change needed. Suggestion: omit disfluencies and keep present simple for general statements.

× Uh, there are no passport, uh, riding bikes and it's not suitable.

✓ There are no proper places for riding bikes, and it is not suitable.

Original 'no passport' is incorrect word choice and article use; likely intended 'proper paths' or 'proper places'. 'Passport' is wrong noun. Also 'riding bikes' needs a noun like 'for riding bikes' and article 'a' or 'proper' to modify 'places'. Suggestion: use 'no proper places/paths for riding bikes' or 'no bike lanes' and remove fillers.