自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or a brief example. Avoid repetition and correct tense/word order (e.g., 'when I was a child'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' appropriately.

示例: No, I didn't. When I was a child my parents thought bicycles were unsafe, so they never bought one for me. As a result, I usually walked or took public transport to school.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific details or examples and use linking words for cohesion. Fix grammar (e.g., 'mostly people' → 'most people', 'a bikes' → 'bikes') and avoid redundancy like 'easily identify, easily get'.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips and cities have bike rental stations, so you can find a bike almost anywhere.

× No, I didn't have because I think bike is not very safe for children and and I remember when I was child I don't have any bike.

✓ No, I didn't because I thought bikes were not very safe for children, and I remember that when I was a child I didn't have any bike.

Multiple tense errors: the student mixed present tense with past contexts. Use past simple 'didn't' and 'thought' for past opinions, and 'were' for safety in past context. Also use 'a child' (article) and 'didn't have' for past possession. Replace 'bike' with plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. Remove duplicated 'and'. Suggestions: keep verbs consistent in past tense when talking about childhood; use articles before singular countable nouns; use plural for general statements about a class of objects.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and I strongly believe that mostly people have a bikes and because of this I think we can easily identify, easily get a bike everywhere.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and I strongly believe that most people have bikes, so we can easily find a bike everywhere.

Errors with quantifier and plurality: use 'most people' (not 'mostly people') and match plural noun 'bikes' with 'have'. 'A bikes' is incorrect (singular article with plural noun). 'Identify' is incorrect verb here; use 'find' or 'get'. Also combine clauses with 'so' for cause and effect. Suggestions: use correct quantifiers ('most' for majority), ensure noun number matches ('bikes' with 'have'), and choose appropriate verbs for meaning.