自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (use past simple: 'was' → 'were', 'couldn't', 'buy' → 'bought').

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn't afford one and they thought I was too young to ride safely, so they never bought me one.

建议: Give a clear main idea, then support with one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Use correct article use ('a bike') and avoid repetition. Include a brief example or consequence to enrich your answer.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars, so bicycles are a cheap and practical way to travel. For example, students and market vendors often use bikes for short daily trips.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was child because our parents did not get bike for us, because when we was child we cannot able to drive on a bike and that the thing that our buy our parents did not bring us a big bike for us, for me.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because our parents did not get a bike for us. When we were children, we could not ride a bike, so our parents did not buy a bike for me.

Errors: incorrect tense and plural forms ('was child' should be 'was a child'; 'when we was child' should be 'when we were children'); incorrect modal construction ('cannot able to' is redundant and wrong; use 'could not' for past ability); wrong verb choice and word order ('did not get bike' and 'did not bring us a big bike' should be 'did not buy a bike' or 'did not get a bike for us'). Suggestion: Use past simple consistently for completed past events ('did not have', 'did not buy'), use correct past modal 'could not' for inability, use 'a child' or 'children' as appropriate, and simplify sentences into two clear sentences to avoid repetition and confusion.

× Yes, bikes are more popular in our country because our most of most of most of populations are not able to buy a motor car because they because they are not able to buy a car.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because most of the population cannot afford to buy a car.

Errors: plural/singular and determiner issues ('most of most of most of populations' is repetitive and incorrect; use 'most of the population' or 'most people'); awkward modal phrasing ('are not able to buy' can be simplified to 'cannot afford to buy'). Suggestion: Use 'most of the population' or 'most people' for general statements, avoid repetition, and use concise modal expressions like 'cannot' or 'cannot afford to'.

× So usually all people have an bike because it is cheap and.

✓ So usually people have a bike because it is cheap.

Errors: incorrect article 'an' before consonant-starting noun 'bike' (should be 'a bike'); extra word 'all' is unnecessary before 'people'; sentence fragment ending 'and.' leaves thought incomplete. Suggestion: Use the correct indefinite article ('a' before consonant sounds), remove redundant words, and complete the sentence or end it clearly.