自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid unclear expressions like “I live on a bicycle.” Use past tense for childhood and give a concrete example or memory.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a simple red bicycle that I rode every day to visit my friends and go to the park. For example, I remember learning to ride it without training wheels when I was seven, which made me feel very independent.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and correct grammar (singular/plural, articles). Avoid repetition and vague phrases like “dream to buy their dream bike.” Mention concrete factors (cost, traffic, culture) to be more persuasive.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and practical for short journeys. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or school due to heavy traffic and limited parking; therefore, cycling has become a common daily habit.

× Indeed, I have a bicycle when I was young.

✓ Indeed, I had a bicycle when I was young.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was young'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Use consistent tense that matches the time reference, e.g., 'I had a bicycle when I was young.'

× I live on a bicycle so much.

✓ I loved riding my bicycle a lot.

The original uses 'live on a bicycle' which is incorrect and unclear. 'Live on' implies subsistence, not riding. Also tense should be past to match 'when I was young.' Use 'loved riding' or 'used to ride' to express frequent past activity. Suggestion: Use verbs like 'love' in past form or 'used to' + base verb for habitual past actions: 'I loved riding my bicycle a lot.' or 'I used to ride my bicycle a lot.'

× In my opinion, bikes are very popular in our country because everyone needs bike to travel from place to place.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are very popular in our country because everyone needs a bike to travel from place to place.

Missing article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'bike'. Also present tense is fine here; use 'a bike' for general statements about each person. Suggestion: Include the indefinite article for singular countable nouns: 'needs a bike.'

× People want their own bike because they also have a dream to buy their dream bike and also.

✓ People want their own bike because they dream of buying the bike they want.

Redundant phrasing 'have a dream to buy their dream bike and also' is awkward and repetitive. 'Because' already connects cause and effect; use a concise structure such as 'dream of buying the bike they want.' Suggestion: Avoid redundancy and use clear verbs/nouns: 'People want their own bike because they dream of buying the bike they want.'