自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevap doğrudur fakat çok kısa ve geliştirilmeye açık. İlk cümlede doğrudan soruya yanıt veriyorsunuz; ardından bir veya iki destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyerek daha doğal ve zengin bir cevap oluşturabilirsiniz. Bağlaçlar (for example, and, because) kullanın, geçmiş zaman ayrıntıları ekleyin (nerede, kimden, nasıl öğrendiniz) ve 3–5 cümlede kalın.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a bright red bicycle that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday. I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood with my friends, which helped me become more confident and independent.

建议: Cevapta fikir ifade ediliyor ancak karışık yapı, tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut. Net bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından karşılaştırma ve örnek verin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini (uh, umm) çıkarın. Bağlaçlar (however, but, although, for example) kullanarak cümlelerin akışını düzeltin ve zaman uyumuna dikkat edin (I moved → I moved). Cümle sayısını 3–5 arasında tutun.

示例: I think bicycles are not very popular in most cities in my country, mainly because public transport and cars are more common. However, they remain popular among children and teenagers for leisure and short trips. In contrast, bicycles are much more common in rural areas where traffic is lighter and distances are shorter.

× Actually in my country bikes are not popular popular in general population uh but it's popular to among umm child or peers.

✓ Actually, in my country bikes are generally not popular among the general population, but they are popular among children and peers.

The original sentence has tense and agreement issues and word order problems. Use present simple 'are' to describe general facts. Remove redundant 'popular' and place 'among the general population' correctly. Use 'they are' to refer back to 'bikes' and plural noun 'children' and 'peers' (not 'child'). Suggestion: simplify the sentence: 'Bikes are generally not popular among the general population, but they are popular among children and peers.'

× And I'm moved to countryside on my country it is popular in here.

✓ Since I moved to the countryside in my country, bikes are popular here.

The original mixes tenses and incorrect prepositions. 'I'm moved' is incorrect for past action; use 'I moved' or 'Since I moved' to connect past action with current situation. Use the article 'the countryside' and preposition 'in my country' correctly. 'It is popular in here' is incorrect; use 'bikes are popular here' to agree in number with 'bikes'.