自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, sentence structure and cohesion. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense forms and articles, add one or two supporting details with linking words, and keep the answer under five sentences. Specifically, change verbs to past tense (was, rode, was gifted), add articles (a/the), and use a linking word to show duration or consequence.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small bicycle my father gifted me for my fifth birthday, and I rode it every day. Because I practiced a lot, I became quite confident riding on the road, and I kept using that bike until I was in tenth grade.

建议: Make the response more concise, avoid repetition, and use correct subject-verb agreement and plural forms. Begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors (for example, because/also). Use vocabulary appropriate to the context (commute, exercise, recreation).

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances and to exercise. For example, children often ride bikes to school, while adults and older people cycle in parks for fitness and relaxation.

× Yes, when I was child I ride a small bike which is gifted by my father on my 5th birthday and after that I ride that bike till 10th class.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I rode a small bike that was given to me by my father on my 5th birthday, and I rode that bike until 10th grade.

Errors: missing article before 'child' (singular noun needs 'a'), plural/number words 'till 10th class' better expressed as 'until 10th grade'. Also contains tense and passive form issues addressed below. Suggestions: use 'a child' for singular, use 'until' for duration up to a point, and use 'grade' or 'class' consistently with an article. Use natural phrasing 'given to me' for passive past action.

× Yes, when I was child I ride a small bike which is gifted by my father on my 5th birthday and after that I ride that bike till 10th class.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I rode a small bike that was given to me by my father on my 5th birthday, and I rode that bike until 10th grade.

The verbs 'ride' and 'is gifted' are incorrectly in present/present passive; the question asks about past events so past simple is required. Use 'rode' (past of 'ride') and 'was given' (past passive) to match the past-time context. Suggestion: identify time markers like 'when I was' and use past simple consistently.

× Yes, it is popular amongst children, amongst teenager and every child, every people and also older people are riding bikes nowadays for doing the exercise.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular among children, teenagers, and adults, and older people also ride bikes nowadays to exercise.

Problems: 'it is popular' is vague—refer to 'bikes' (plural). Use 'among' rather than 'amongst' for modern usage (both acceptable but 'among' is more common). 'Teenager' should be plural 'teenagers'; 'every child, every people' is incorrect—use 'children' or 'every person'. 'Older people are riding bikes nowadays for doing the exercise' is awkward: use 'older people also ride bikes nowadays to exercise.' Suggestions: match plural subject 'bikes' with plural predicates, use plural nouns for groups, and use infinitive 'to exercise' for purpose.

× Yes, it is popular amongst children, amongst teenager and every child, every people and also older people are riding bikes nowadays for doing the exercise.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular among children, teenagers, and adults, and older people also ride bikes nowadays to exercise.

Using 'it is popular' incorrectly treats 'bikes' as 'it'. The correct subject is plural 'bikes', so use 'bikes are popular' (third person plural). Also 'older people are riding' is acceptable but 'older people also ride' is simpler and matches habitual present. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number; use plural verbs with plural nouns.