自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your response more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g., “before during weekends when I do not go to school” is confusing). Use past-tense consistently and vary vocabulary slightly.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike and rode it almost every afternoon with my friends. For example, on weekends we would cycle to the park and practice simple races, which was my favourite way to spend free time.

建议: Provide a clear opinion sentence followed by specific, coherent details and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., “for example”, “also”) and avoid filler sounds like “umm.” Correct subject-verb agreement and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “many people ride bicycles for sport or commuting”).

示例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in the Philippines. For example, many people ride them to commute in cities, and there are also cycling clubs that train on weekends for sport. Additionally, bike lanes have started appearing in some urban areas, making cycling more common.

× I biked around with my friends and that was how I spent my free time before during weekends when I do not go to school.

✓ I biked around with my friends, and that was how I spent my free time on weekends when I did not have school.

The original sentence mixes past and present tenses ('biked' and 'do not go'). Maintain past tense for past habits. Also 'before during weekends' is incorrect; use 'on weekends' and 'did not have school' (or 'was not at school') to match past time frame.

× Here you can see through the streets, even on main roads and highways.

✓ Here you can see them on the streets, even on main roads and highways.

'See through the streets' is incorrect; use 'see them on the streets'. The preposition 'on' is appropriate for roads and streets. Also 'them' refers back to bikes/people mentioned.

× There are people who rides there, who ride their bicycles, umm, as a sport.

✓ There are people who ride their bicycles there, even as a sport.

The relative clause uses plural 'people', so the verb should be 'ride' not 'rides'. Also streamline word order: place 'there' after 'bicycles' or at end; 'even as a sport' clarifies meaning.