自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and reduce redundancy (e.g., avoid repeating ‘I used to’).

示例: Yes. My father bought me a bicycle when I was a child so I could ride the two kilometres to school. For example, I used it every day to get to UMM, which saved me about 30 minutes compared with walking.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'however', 'now') and avoid hesitation phrases. Provide a concise comparison between past and present.

示例: Yes, I think bicycles were more popular about 20 years ago because motorbikes and cars were less common then. However, now many people prefer motorbikes for speed and convenience, so cycling has declined in cities.

× Yes, when I was a child my dad bought me a bike specifically for me to ride to school because the school was 2 kilometers away. So I can walk to my school at UMM I used to do.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my dad bought me a bike specifically for me to ride to school because the school was 2 kilometers away, so I used to walk to my school at UMM.

Mixed tense and awkward word order: the sentence begins in past tense ('was', 'bought') but then uses present tense 'can' and the phrase order 'I used to do' at the end is incorrect. Use past habitual 'used to walk' to match the past context and place it directly after the clause. Also join clauses with a comma and use natural word order 'I used to walk to my school at UMM.' Suggestion: keep all verbs in past when describing past routines (was, bought, used to walk).

× I think it, I think buys used to be popular in my country about, I don't know, 20 years ago or or more Back then there hasn't been back then motorbikes wasn't introduced.

✓ I think bikes used to be popular in my country about, I don't know, 20 years ago or more. Back then motorbikes had not been introduced.

Multiple tense and word form errors: 'buys' is incorrect; the noun 'bikes' is needed. 'Used to' expresses past habit so pair with base verb 'be' as 'used to be.' The second sentence mixes present perfect and past simple incorrectly ('hasn't been' and 'wasn't introduced'). Use past perfect 'had not been introduced' to indicate that before that time motorbikes were not available. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'bikes' not 'buys', 'used to be' for past habits, and 'had not been introduced' to show earlier non-existence compared to the reference past time.

× So we mostly communi.

✓ So we mostly commuted/used them for commuting.

Incomplete and misspelled sentence: 'communi' is not a full word. Depending on intended meaning, use 'commuted' (past verb) or 'used them for commuting' to clearly express that bikes were mainly used for travel to places like school. Ensure the verb is complete and matches past context. Suggestion: use complete verbs and proper spelling ('commute', 'commuted', 'commuting').