自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer in the past tense and add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid fillers (uh, umm) and repetition. Use a clear topic sentence (“No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.”) then add a reason or brief example (“My family couldn't afford one” or “I used a friend's bike sometimes”).

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school. Occasionally I borrowed a friend's bicycle to practise riding in the park.

建议: Answer directly, then expand with specific reasons and use linking words. Reduce personal repetition and fillers. Start with a clear opinion sentence (“Yes, bikes are quite popular”) and follow with 2–3 specific supporting points (e.g., reasons for popularity, who uses them, examples). Use linking words such as ‘because’, ‘for example’, or ‘however’.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many students and market vendors cycle every day, and cities have dedicated bike lanes to encourage cycling.

× Uh, no, I don't have a bike.

✓ Uh, no, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Using present tense 'don't have' is incorrect for a past context. Use 'didn't have' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Pay attention to time markers (e.g., 'when I was a child') and shift verbs to past tense.

× Bike when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

This fragment lacks a subject and a finite verb, making it an incomplete sentence. It appears to repeat the same idea as the previous line; combine it into a complete sentence with a subject and past-tense verb. Use 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.' Suggestion: Always include a subject and a conjugated verb to form a complete sentence.

× Umm, it's just that my parents can't afford to buy one.

✓ Umm, it's just that my parents couldn't afford to buy one.

The student refers to why they did not have a bike in the past, so the verb about parents' ability should be in the past ('couldn't afford') rather than present ('can't afford'). Match tense to the past context. Suggestion: Keep reasons in the same time frame as the main statement.

× That's why I don't have a bike.

✓ That's why I didn't have a bike.

Again, the student is explaining a past situation. 'Don't have' is present tense and mismatches the past context. Use 'didn't have' to maintain past tense consistency. Suggestion: When explaining past circumstances, shift supporting verbs to past tense.

× But uh, umm, when I was a child, I was able to practice riding on a bicycle using my friend's bike.

✓ But uh, umm, when I was a child, I was able to practice riding a bicycle using my friend's bike.

The phrase 'riding on a bicycle' is not incorrect but 'riding a bicycle' is more natural and concise in English. This is a usage/style improvement rather than a strict grammar error. Also ensure past context ('was able to') is correct. Suggestion: Prefer 'ride a bicycle' or 'riding a bicycle' for natural phrasing; avoid unnecessary prepositions like 'on'.