自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response grammatically correct, concise, and relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), give one specific supporting detail, and avoid unrelated words (e.g. “mouse”). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it to ride to school most days because my home was only a few kilometres away, which made cycling quicker and more enjoyable than walking.

建议: Answer directly, use clear reasons and one or two specific examples. Use linking words (for example, because, so) correctly and keep sentences simpler and grammatically correct. Avoid vague time shifts and unclear phrases.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many students and commuters prefer them for short trips. For example, when my school moved farther away, I and several classmates started cycling to save time and money.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I was a child, because in Paris I used the mouse to use the bike to go to the school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, because in Paris I used the bike to go to school.

The student mixed present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had'. 'Used the mouse' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'used the bike' or 'used it'. Also 'go to the school' should be 'go to school' (no article). Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events and choose correct noun referent (it/the bike).

× Yes, I think it is very popular in our country because when I was a child, I walked to school about when the school place is changed, the distance will become far, so I must use the bike and surrounding me, my class may also use the bike.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because when I was a child I walked to school, but when the school moved further away I had to use a bike, and many students around me also used bikes.

Multiple tense and sentence structure problems: 'I think it is very popular' — referent should be plural 'bikes are' (present general statement). The clause 'when the school place is changed, the distance will become far' mixes present and future; describe past change with past tense: 'when the school moved further away'. 'So I must use the bike' should be past: 'I had to use a bike'. 'Surrounding me, my class may also use the bike' is ungrammatical; correct to 'many students around me also used bikes'. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent (present for general truths, past for past events), match plural/singular nouns, and simplify clauses for clarity.