自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the reply clearer and natural by correcting grammar and removing repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one supporting detail using a linking word. For example, avoid saying "how how" and fix word order: "I didn't have a bike" not "I didn't have how bike". Also replace "that from my siblings" with "from my older sibling(s)" or "my siblings' bikes." Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child, but I often rode my siblings’ bikes. For instance, my older brother lent me his bike on weekends, so I learned to ride in our neighborhood park.

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but improve grammar and cohesion. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then use linking words correctly and maintain verb agreement (e.g., "cycling is gradually becoming"). Add one specific example or brief comparison to strengthen the response. Keep it concise (2–4 sentences).

示例: Bikes are not very popular across Mongolia because there are few safe bike lanes and limited infrastructure. However, some local cycling clubs and events are promoting cycling, so it is gradually becoming more common in urban areas like Ulaanbaatar.

× Not really. I didn't have how how bike when I was a child, but I used to ride a bike that from my siblings.

✓ Not really. I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I used to ride a bike from my siblings.

The sentence contains extra words and incorrect word order, causing a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the duplicated 'how how' which is meaningless, and correct article placement: 'a bike' is required after 'have'. Also change 'ride a bike that from my siblings' to 'ride a bike from my siblings' to use correct word order and preposition. Suggestion: keep sentences simple and place modifiers after the noun they describe.

× However, some local cycling clubs and enthusiasts are promoting the sport, so cycling gradually becoming more common in certain areas.

✓ However, some local cycling clubs and enthusiasts are promoting the sport, so cycling is gradually becoming more common in certain areas.

This sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'is' before the present participle 'becoming', causing a present tense/verb form error (ID 6). Add 'is' to form the present continuous 'is becoming'. Also ensure consistency: 'are promoting' and 'is becoming' both describe ongoing actions. Suggestion: when using present participles to show ongoing change, include the appropriate form of 'to be'.