自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with tense, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar: use past simple for past events (e.g., 'I had' not 'I do have'), use correct verb forms ('I got' not 'I get'), and use clearer phrasing for the reason and description. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences, avoid redundancy and fix small vocabulary/number errors ('two extra wheels' or 'training wheels' instead of 'supporting').

示例: I had a bike when I was a child. My first bike was given to me by my aunt when I was about two years old, and it had two training wheels because I was too young to ride a two‑wheeled bicycle. I remember practicing in our yard until I could balance on my own.

建议: Use clear, grammatical sentences and avoid fillers. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add specific supporting details and use linking words (e.g., 'However', 'For example'). Fix subject-verb agreement ('our country was not that developed' or better 'less developed'), and use precise vocabulary ('means of transport' or 'mode of transportation'). Provide a brief contrast with the present if relevant. Keep to 2–3 sentences and be specific (who used bikes, why, and how that has changed).

示例: Bikes were very popular in China in the early 2000s because many cities were less developed and people used bicycles as their main mode of transport. However, in recent years more people use cars and public transport, so bike use in some places has declined, although cycling is still common for short trips.

× Yeah, I do have a bike.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the response should use past tense. Using present tense 'do have' is inconsistent. Use 'had' to match the past context.

× When I was 2 years old, that was my first bike and I get it from my auntie and then at that time it has four wheels and two of them are supporting because I'm too young to ride A2 wheel bicycle.

✓ When I was 2 years old, that was my first bike and I got it from my auntie; at that time it had four wheels, two of which were supporting wheels because I was too young to ride a two-wheel bicycle.

Multiple past-tense verbs are required to describe past events. 'get' should be past 'got', 'has' should be past 'had', and 'I'm' should be past 'I was'. Also correct phrasing: 'two of them are supporting' -> 'two of which were supporting wheels' and 'A2 wheel' -> 'a two-wheel'. Ensure consistent past tense throughout the sentence.

× In my country, China, bikes are very popular in the first, uh, early 2000s.

✓ In my country, China, bikes were very popular in the early 2000s.

The speaker refers to a past time period ('early 2000s'), so past tense 'were' is appropriate instead of present 'are'. Also remove redundant words 'the first, uh,' for clarity.

× Our country are are not that developed, so people choose choose bike as their first transportation and they go everywhere on back.

✓ Our country was not that developed, so people chose bikes as their main form of transportation and they went everywhere by bike.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement 'Our country are' should be 'Our country was' (past context). Repeated words 'are are' and 'choose choose' should be single instances. 'Choose' and 'go' should be past tense 'chose' and 'went' to match the time frame. 'Bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'First transportation' is awkward; 'main form of transportation' is idiomatic. 'They go everywhere on back' is incorrect; use 'went everywhere by bike.'