自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and fluent: give a clear topic sentence, add one specific detail, and avoid filler words (uh, umm). Use a linking word to connect ideas (for example, "so" or "after that"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes. My grandfather bought me a bike with training wheels when I was six. I practised riding in the alley behind our house, and after a few weeks I could ride without the training wheels.

建议: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with two clear, specific reasons using linking words (for example, "because" and "however"). Reduce repetition and filler words. Use precise vocabulary ("bike-sharing stations" or "cycling infrastructure").

示例: Not really. Although the government introduced bike-sharing stations a few years ago, cycling never became popular because our climate is very hot and many streets lack safe cycle lanes.

× Yes, uh, my grandfather bought me a bike with training, uh, wheels when I was 6.

✓ Yes, my grandfather bought me a bike with training wheels when I was six.

The sentence used informal fillers and comma placement around 'training wheels' was awkward. Change '6' to the word 'six' for formality in speaking transcripts. Remove unnecessary fillers 'uh' and extra commas to make the past action clear and fluent. The tense 'bought' is correct (past simple) for a past event.

× I used to ride the bike, umm, in the alley at the back, back of our house.

✓ I used to ride the bike in the alley at the back of our house.

Remove filler 'umm' and the redundant phrase 'back, back of our house.' The structure was repetitive. 'Used to ride' correctly indicates a past habitual action; streamline the sentence for clarity.

× Then I, uh, trained.

✓ Then I practiced riding it.

The verb 'trained' is vague and incomplete here. In this context the meaning is that the student practiced riding the bike or removed the training wheels. Use a clear verb phrase 'practiced riding it' (past simple) to convey the intended action.

× Not really, not really.

✓ Not really.

Repeating 'Not really' is redundant. Use a single, concise response. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammar error.

× Uh, uh, there was a time when government tried to umm, implement the culture and they made a bicycle stations around the city.

✓ There was a time when the government tried to promote cycling culture and they established bicycle stations around the city.

Several issues: missing definite article 'the' before 'government' (article error), awkward verb choice 'implement the culture' (use 'promote cycling culture'), and plural agreement with 'stations' required after 'a' was incorrect. Use past tense verbs 'tried' and 'established' correctly. Remove fillers.

× They installed a bicycle stations around the city, but it was not popular because the weather here is too hot and riding bicycle.

✓ They installed bicycle stations around the city, but it was not popular because the weather here is too hot for cycling.

Problems corrected: remove the indefinite article before plural 'stations' ('a bicycle stations' is incorrect). Replace 'riding bicycle' with the gerund phrase 'for cycling' to express purpose/ability in context. Also keep tense consistent: 'was not popular' refers to past initiative; 'is too hot' can remain present general fact, but rephrase to 'is too hot for cycling' for grammatical completeness.