自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, use past tense consistently, avoid hesitation sounds and unclear words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details linked with a connector. For example, correct grammar: use 'I had' instead of 'I have' and clarify 'floated' (probably 'bought' or 'gifted'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and remove fillers like 'uh' and 'um'.

示例: I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me as a birthday present, and I rode it to school every day until I was twelve.

建议: Answer directly, use appropriate tense and clearer structure. Begin with a clear opinion (Yes/No + brief reason), then add a specific example using linking words like 'but' or 'however' and avoid repetition. Fix grammar: say 'I used to see' for past habits and 'nowadays there are many companies that provide shared bicycles.' Keep it within 3 sentences and remove hesitations.

示例: Yes, I think bikes have become more popular. In the past I used to see mostly cars on the streets, but nowadays many companies provide shared bicycles, so more people cycle for short trips.

× Yes, I have a bike. It was floated by my father and uh, he gave it to me as a gift.

✓ Yes, I had a bike. It was bought by my father, and he gave it to me as a gift.

ID 6 and 5 apply: The student mixed present tense 'have' with the past context of childhood; use past tense 'had'. Also 'floated' is incorrect verb choice; likely meant 'bought' (past simple) to indicate the action of purchasing. Use past simple consistently for completed actions in the past. Suggestion: refer to time markers (when I was a child) and use past simple verbs (had, bought, gave).

× Umm, yes, umm, when I was a child, uh, I can see lots of cars in the street and uh, nowadays, uh, there are bike companies will place, uh, plenty of shared bicycle, bikes bicycle.

✓ Umm, yes. When I was a child, I saw a lot of cars in the streets, and nowadays many bike companies have placed plenty of shared bicycles.

This sentence contains multiple issues: ID 6 (present tense misuse) — 'I can see' is wrong for a past habitual observation; use past 'I saw'. ID 7/6 mixture — 'nowadays' requires present perfect or present simple for ongoing situations; 'have placed' or 'are placing' is appropriate. ID 11/article/word choice — 'lots of' is informal; 'a lot of' or 'many' is better; 'in the street' should be 'in the streets'. ID 22/word choice — 'bike companies will place' mixes future 'will' incorrectly; use present perfect 'have placed' or present continuous 'are placing'. ID 13/repetition — redundant words 'bicycle, bikes bicycle' should be corrected to 'bicycles' or 'shared bicycles'. Suggestions: match tense to time cues (when I was a child = past simple; nowadays = present perfect or present simple for general truth), remove duplicate words, and use appropriate plural forms and articles.