自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct past tense and vocabulary errors (e.g., bicycle, back → bike, ride back → ride it back?). Avoid filler sounds. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I did. My grandfather gave me a small black-and-red bicycle when I was in primary school, and I learned to ride it in our backyard. Because it was tiny, I practiced almost every afternoon until I could ride without help, which made me very proud.

建议: Give a direct opinion sentence and then provide one or two clear reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (use 'they are' or 'bikes are'), avoid fillers, and use specific vocabulary about popularity and environment. Keep it concise and coherent.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. In the past decade more people have chosen cycling because it is cheaper and better for the environment, so cities have also built more bike lanes to encourage cycling.

× Yes I did, my grandpa sent me a small bicycle when I was in the primary school.

✓ Yes, I did. My grandpa sent me a small bicycle when I was in primary school.

Run-on sentence and article use: Two independent clauses were joined with a comma (comma splice). Also 'in the primary school' is unnatural; when talking about schooling in general, use 'in primary school' without the definite article. Suggestion: separate clauses with a period or conjunction and remove 'the' before 'primary school'.

× It's black and red and it's very small.

✓ It was black and red and very small.

Tense consistency: The student is describing a past object, so use past tense 'was' instead of 'is/it's'. Also 'and' before 'very small' is fine but redundant; concise past description is preferred. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing past possessions.

× It's only for child.

✓ It was only for children.

Number agreement: 'child' is singular but the context refers to the intended user group in general, which requires the plural 'children'. Also tense consistency requires 'was'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to a category or group.

× Umm. I learn how to ride a bicycle by this back and sometimes I will ride this back to find.

✓ I learned how to ride a bicycle on that bike, and sometimes I would ride that bike to explore.

Multiple issues: tense and verb choice — 'learn' should be past 'learned' to match past context (Past tense issue) and 'this back' is incorrect vocabulary and structure. Likely meant 'that bike'. 'ride this back to find' is ungrammatical; 'to explore' or 'to get around' fits. Also modal/time consistency: use 'would' or 'used to' for habitual past actions. Suggestion: use correct past forms, correct noun 'bike', and choose appropriate phrase for purpose ('to explore', 'to get around').

× Yeah, I think he is very popular in my country 'cause, you know, uh, in the, in the past decade, people always driving and the environmental has a lot of stress for the, uh, provisions and uh.

✓ Yeah, I think they are very popular in my country because, in the past decade, people have been driving a lot and the environment has suffered a lot of pressure as a result.

Pronoun and agreement: 'he' incorrectly refers to 'bikes' (plural and non-human); use 'they'. Tense and aspect: 'in the past decade' with ongoing effect requires present perfect continuous or present perfect ('have been driving' or 'have driven'). 'People always driving' is ungrammatical; add auxiliary verbs. 'the environmental has a lot of stress' misuse of noun/adjective and article — 'environment' (noun) not 'environmental' (adjective), and 'has suffered a lot of pressure' is natural. 'for the provisions' is unclear; likely 'as a result' or 'on natural resources' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use correct pronouns for non-human plural nouns, use present perfect for actions over a period up to now, and use 'environment' with verbs like 'suffer' or 'be under pressure'.