自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Используйте правильные времена и порядок слов, сокращайте лишние фразы и добавляйте соединительные слова. Например, начните с чёткого тематического предложения в прошедшем времени, затем кратко объясните процесс и завершите выражением эмоции или вывода. Избегайте прямых буквальных переводов и ошибочной формы глагола (например, "I have" → "I had").

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. At first I couldn’t ride it, but my parents taught me how, and I felt very happy when I finally learned.

建议: Сформулируйте ответ чётко и используйте связки для логики (например, "generally", "because", "for example"). Используйте корректные формы существительных и притяжательные конструкции, избегайте пауз типа "uh". Дайте конкретные примеры групп людей и объясните причину популярности или непопулярности.

示例: Generally it depends on age. Bikes are more popular among children and older people because they use them for short trips and exercise, while many adults prefer cars or public transport; for example, my parents never rode bikes to work.

× Yes I have, but from beginning I can't run it.

✓ Yes, I had one, but at first I couldn't ride it.

The student is talking about a past situation, so present tense 'have' and 'can't' are incorrect. Use past simple 'had' for possession in the past and 'couldn't' (past of 'can') for ability. 'From beginning' is unnatural; use 'at first'. Also 'run' is wrong collocation for riding a bike; use 'ride'. Suggestions: change present verbs to past simple, replace 'from beginning' with 'at first', and use 'ride' for bicycles.

× But my parents teach me and I'm very glad for that to them.

✓ But my parents taught me, and I'm very grateful to them for that.

The action of teaching happened in the past, so use past simple 'taught' instead of present 'teach'. 'I'm very glad for that to them' is ungrammatical: use 'I'm very grateful to them for that' or 'I'm very glad because of that'. 'Grateful' is the correct adjective to express thanks and 'to them' indicates the recipient. Also maintain past reference for the whole idea. Suggestions: use past tense for past events, use 'grateful' and correct word order 'grateful to them for that'.

× It depends on age category of people.

✓ It depends on people's age group.

The phrase 'age category of people' is awkward and not natural English. 'It depends on people's age group' or 'It depends on age group' is more natural. Also possessive form 'people's' helps clarity. Suggestions: use 'age group' and possessive 'people's' or say 'on the age group'.

× I think it's more popular between children's and old person than uh adults.

✓ I think it's more popular among children and older people than among adults.

Several errors: 'between' is wrong with more than two groups and with collective nouns—use 'among'. 'Children's' is a possessive; should be plural 'children'. 'Old person' should be plural or 'older people'. Also compare groups with 'than among adults' or simply 'than adults'. Suggestions: use 'among' for groups, use correct plurals 'children' and 'older people', and keep parallel structure.

× Because my parents don't use it.

✓ Because my parents don't use bicycles.

The sentence is short but 'it' is ambiguous; specify 'bicycles' for clarity. Present simple 'don't use' is acceptable if the meaning is they currently don't use bikes. Ensure noun form matches context. Suggestions: replace pronoun 'it' with 'bicycles' or 'them' and keep present simple if referring to current habit.