自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid tense errors and redundant phrases. For example, use past tense consistently, replace informal fillers, and give a brief specific memory or reason.

示例: Yes, I did. My parents encouraged me to ride a bike because they wanted me to get regular exercise and build strength. For instance, I used to cycle to the nearby park every weekend with my brother, which helped me become fitter.

建议: Give a clear, grammatically correct statement and support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove fillers and repetition, and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'better for the environment' or 'reduce pollution'). Keep the response to at most five sentences.

示例: Yes, I think bicycles are becoming more popular. This is because more people are health-conscious and choose cycling for exercise; moreover, cycling reduces traffic congestion and is better for the environment, which encourages urban bike-sharing programs.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' is present; use past auxiliary 'did' for a short affirmative answer to a past question. Suggestion: match the tense of the question (past), use 'Yes, I did.' or 'Yes, I had one.'

× When I was a child my parents would like me to ride my bike 'cause they say I can't exercise and strengthen my body.

✓ When I was a child, my parents encouraged me to ride my bike because they said I could exercise and strengthen my body.

Several issues: 'would like me to' is incorrect for habitual past encouragement; use 'encouraged' (past simple). 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'They say' refers to past viewpoint; use past 'they said'. 'I can't exercise' conflicts with intended meaning; should be 'I could exercise' (past ability) or 'I could get exercise'. This fits past-tense context. Suggestion: use past verbs for past context and choose 'encouraged' to express parental urging.

× Yes, it is 'cause I think nowadays more and more people are more focused on their health and they would like to, umm, like riding a bike rather than drive a car because it's more like, uh, good for environment, good for the ecosystem.

✓ Yes, they are, because I think nowadays more and more people are focused on their health and prefer riding a bike rather than driving a car because it's better for the environment and the ecosystem.

Subject agreement and tense: 'bikes' is plural, so use 'they are' not 'it is' (singular). 'Would like to, umm, like riding' is awkward; use 'prefer riding' or 'would rather ride'. 'Rather than drive' needs gerund or parallel form 'driving'. 'It's more like, uh, good for environment' is informal and missing article; use 'it's better for the environment'. Use 'the environment' and optionally 'the ecosystem'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement (plural subject -> plural verb), use parallel verb forms, remove filler words, and include articles where needed.