自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear but a little repetitive and short. To improve, give a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases (e.g., “used to” multiple times). Also try to vary vocabulary and include a brief reason or feeling to make the response more natural.

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, I often watched other kids ride around the neighborhood and admired their freedom, especially on weekends when they raced each other. Because my family prioritized saving money, I had to make do with walking and playing in the yard instead.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains unclear phrasing and a colloquial fragment (“like came from wealthy families like that”). Improve by stating your main opinion directly, then give specific evidence and a clear reason using linking words. Avoid informal fillers and correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement).

示例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Although some children ride them frequently in certain neighborhoods, these bikes are often owned by wealthier families who can afford them, so overall cycling is less common as a mainstream mode of transport.

× Growing up I didn't.

✓ Growing up I didn't have one.

The original sentence 'Growing up I didn't.' is incomplete and lacks a clear verb or object; this is a sentence structure problem but also a present/past tense reference: the question asked about having a bike when you were a child (past), so a full past-tense response is required. Adding 'have one' completes the idea and matches the past context. Suggestion: always include the verb and object when answering a question about possession in the past (e.g., 'I didn't have one.').

× I didn't have a bike, but I used to admire children who used to have them.

✓ I didn't have a bike, but I used to admire children who had them.

Using 'used to' twice is unnecessary; 'used to' + base verb expresses a past habitual action. In the subordinate clause, simple past 'had' is sufficient to indicate possession in the past. Also change 'them' to refer clearly to 'bikes' works, but 'had them' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'used to' once for the subject's habitual action and simple past for the possession of others (e.g., 'I used to admire children who had bikes').

× Bikes are not popular in my country, however I've seen children ride them constantly on the streets and they were the ones who like came from wealthy families like that.

✓ Bikes are not popular in my country; however, I've seen children riding them often on the streets, and they were the ones who came from wealthy families.

Multiple issues: 'I've seen children ride them constantly' is grammatically acceptable but 'riding them often' is more natural; 'constantly' can sound exaggerated. The phrase 'who like came from' contains the filler 'like' which is informal and ungrammatical here; remove 'like'. 'Came' correctly is simple past to match 'were the ones'; keep 'came' without 'like'. Also add proper punctuation ('; however,') for clarity. Suggestion: avoid filler words like 'like' in formal answers, use 'riding' or 'ride' consistently, and choose appropriate adverbs ('often' rather than 'constantly') to sound natural.