自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and verb forms, and avoid run-on sentences. Add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, it was stolen by burglars when I was about 12, so I haven't owned one since then. I miss it because it was my main way to go to friends' houses and explore the neighborhood.

建议: Make your opinion clearer and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your view, then give specific reasons with linking words. Correct small grammar issues and remove fillers like "uh."

示例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. This is because we have an extensive subway and reliable bus services, so most people prefer public transport. Consequently, fewer people use bicycles for daily commuting, especially in big cities.

× 'Yes, I used to have a bike as a child but it get robbed by some burglars when I was like 12 years old so I don't have a bike since then.'

✓ 'Yes, I used to have a bike as a child, but it was stolen by some burglars when I was about 12 years old, so I have not had a bike since then.'

'get robbed' is incorrect in this context and the verb tense is wrong: an event in the past requires the past simple passive "was stolen." Also, the second clause refers to a state continuing from that past event to the present, so use present perfect "have not had" rather than simple present "don't have". Additionally, use "about" instead of informal "like" for an age. Suggestion: use past simple passive for the theft (was stolen) and present perfect for the ongoing result (have not had).'

× 'No, I don't think so, because we have good subway and we have good uh, bus system to move around the city. Even though bikes are popular, are not that popular.'

✓ 'No, I don't think so, because we have a good subway system and a good bus system to get around the city. Although bikes exist, they are not that popular.'

'we have good subway' and 'we have good uh, bus system' are missing articles: use "a good subway system" and "a good bus system." "to move around the city" is natural but "to get around the city" is more idiomatic. The final sentence incorrectly omits the subject "they" and uses a contradictory connector. "Even though bikes are popular, are not that popular" is self-contradictory and missing subject; revise to "Although bikes exist, they are not that popular." Use present simple for general facts (they are not).'