自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Start with a clear, direct topic sentence and avoid hesitations and repetition. Briefly explain the reason, using correct tense and concise phrasing, and add one specific detail to enrich the answer. Use linking words (e.g., because, so, but) correctly and keep the answer under five sentences.

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was always afraid of riding. For that reason, I preferred playing team sports like cricket and racket sports such as badminton. As a result, I spent most weekends at the local sports ground with friends.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one example. Reduce hesitations and use more natural vocabulary (e.g., affordable, common, practical). Use linking words to organize ideas (for example, because, for instance, therefore).

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For instance, many families own at least one motorbike to commute to work or go to the market, and this makes two-wheelers a common sight on city roads.

× No, I didn't have a bike in my childhood because I'm scared for riding bike and I but I play some umm, uh, cricket, play badminton, yeah.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was scared of riding a bike, but I played cricket and badminton.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'in my childhood' (use 'when I was a child'); incorrect present tense 'I'm scared' should match past context 'I was scared'; incorrect preposition 'scared for riding' should be 'scared of riding'; missing article before 'bike' and inconsistent verb tenses 'but I play' should be past 'but I played'. Suggestions: use 'when I was a child' for time in the past, match verb tenses (past with past), use 'scared of' + gerund, include articles where needed and list activities in parallel form. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, I do. I think uh, bikes are very popular in my country because uh, every person can purchase uh, bike uh, because it has cheap amount and yeah, I think.

✓ Yes, I do. I think bikes are very popular in my country because anyone can afford a bike since they are inexpensive.

Problems: awkward phrase 'every person can purchase bike' and missing article 'a bike'; 'it has cheap amount' is incorrect—use 'they are inexpensive' or 'they are affordable'. Also 'every person' is better as 'anyone' and subject agreement 'bike' should match plural reference 'they'. Suggestions: use 'anyone can afford a bike' or 'bikes are affordable', ensure correct article usage and pronoun agreement when referring back to 'bikes'. Grammar problem type ID:6