自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce filler words (um, uh) and correct small grammar issues (e.g. “I used to ride it every day,” “it was my favorite color”). Use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child, and I used to ride it every day. It was a purple bike that my father gave me, so it was especially meaningful. Because I practiced on it constantly, I became confident riding on busy streets by the age of ten.

建议: Give a direct answer first, then support with two specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like “however,” “for example,” or “because” to make your answer coherent.

示例: I think bicycles are less popular now than they used to be. Many people prefer subways or cars because these options are faster and more convenient. For example, commuters often take the subway to avoid traffic, so cycling is mainly common for leisure or short trips rather than daily commuting.

× When I was a child I had a bike I used to bike and get every day.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike I used to ride and get around on every day.

The verb 'bike' used as a verb is informal here; 'ride' is more natural. Also add comma after introductory clause and include 'get around on' to clarify daily use. Use past habitual 'used to' correctly with base verb 'ride'.

× Umm, I was so interested in riding bicycle because it was a gift from my dad and it means a lot to me even now.

✓ I was very interested in riding a bicycle because it was a gift from my dad, and it still means a lot to me.

Use 'very' instead of informal 'so' for clarity. Include the article 'a' before 'bicycle'. Maintain tense consistency: 'was' for past interest and 'still means' for present continued significance. Add comma before conjunction for sentence flow.

× Uh, so umm, I used it and umm, it was purple because my favorite.

✓ I used it, and it was purple because it was my favorite.

The fragment 'because my favorite' lacks a verb. Include 'was' to form 'it was my favorite'. Maintain past tense 'was' for consistency. Also remove extra filler words for clarity.

× Unfortunately, nowadays people have different attitudes about vehicles and transportation.

✓ Unfortunately, nowadays people have different attitudes toward vehicles and transportation.

Use 'toward' (or 'towards') as the common preposition with 'attitudes' in this context. The present tense 'have' is correct; change preposition to fix the phrase.

× They have different preferences.

✓ They have different preferences.

This sentence is acceptable grammatically; no change necessary. It correctly expresses variation in preferences. (Included for completeness.)

× Therefore, they prefer to use subways or motorcycle or even cars because they are more accessible and they can.

✓ Therefore, they prefer to use the subway, motorcycles, or even cars because they are more accessible and convenient.

Use articles and plural forms appropriately: 'the subway' (or 'subways') and 'motorcycles' plural. Remove the incomplete clause 'and they can' and replace with 'convenient' to complete the thought. Ensure parallel structure in the list and use adjectives correctly.