自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid fillers (e.g., “only actually”) and correct small grammar errors (“a space” not “an space”).

示例: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it in the yard because we didn’t have much public space nearby. As a result, most of my practice was around the house until I was older.

建议: Begin with a direct topic sentence and use a linking word to connect reasons. Avoid repetition (don’t say “too” twice) and correct collocations (“environmentally friendly”). Add a specific example or brief comparison to strengthen your point.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because most children learn to ride at a very young age. Moreover, they are cheap and convenient for short trips; for example, many people use bicycles to commute to the local market instead of driving.

× Only actually we didn't really have that much of an space outside of our house, so.

✓ Only, actually, we didn't really have that much space outside our house.

Use of the article 'an' before 'space' is incorrect because 'space' is an uncountable noun here and does not take 'a' or 'an'. Also reduce redundant words and remove extraneous comma and 'of' after 'much'. Suggestion: say 'we didn't really have much space outside our house.'

× especially since we learn to ride bikes since childhood, like very early on.

✓ especially since we learn to ride bikes in childhood, very early on.

The sentence uses 'since' twice which is redundant and mixes time reference forms. Use 'in childhood' to indicate the general period or use 'since childhood' with a present perfect verb. For example: 'we learn to ride bikes in childhood' or 'we have learned to ride bikes since childhood.' Maintain consistent tense with 'learn' or change to present perfect for ongoing relevance.

× Bikes are easy to ride too.

✓ Bikes are easy to ride as well.

'Too' is not incorrect but 'as well' is a slightly more formal alternative. The original is acceptable in spoken English; change is optional for register. If marked as error, prefer 'as well' to avoid repetition of 'too' later in the paragraph.

× Not to mention they are environmental friendly too.

✓ Not to mention they are environmentally friendly, too.

'Environmental' is an adjective describing the field; the correct adverb form 'environmentally' is needed to modify 'friendly'. Also add comma before 'too' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'environmentally friendly' to describe products or practices that help the environment.