自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify tense and facts, organize into a clear topic sentence plus brief supporting detail, correct factual errors (e.g. 'didn't have a bike' not 'didn't have a family'), and avoid repetition. Use one or two linking words to connect reason and consequence. Keep response to 2–4 sentences.

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents were quite strict and wouldn't let me own one, so I usually borrowed my friends' bikes to ride instead.

建议: Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then add specific supporting details and linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Mention who uses bikes, how often, and give a brief personal comment or comparison. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, bikes are still very popular in my country. Many children and teenagers use bicycles every day to get to school or visit friends, and in some cities adults cycle for short commutes as well; therefore I wished I had one as a child.

× Uh, no I don't.

✓ Uh, no I didn't.

The question asks 'Did you have...' which requires a response in the past tense. The student used present tense 'I don't' which is inconsistent. Use 'I didn't' to match the past-tense question. Suggestion: Answer questions with auxiliary tense consistent with the question (use 'did' + base verb or 'didn't' for negative replies).

× I don't.

✓ I didn't.

Same as above: context is past time ('when you were a child'), so use past tense 'I didn't' instead of present 'I don't'. Suggestion: Align verb tense with the time frame referenced in the question.

× I didn't have a family when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence says 'I didn't have a family' which is illogical in context; likely the intended object is 'a bike'. This is a content/word-choice error affecting sentence meaning and structure. Suggestion: Use the correct noun to match context; here 'bike' fits the examiner's question.

× My family was so strict before so I don't have own own it personally.

✓ My family was so strict before, so I didn't own one personally.

The sentence mixes past ('was') with present ('don't have') and has incorrect word order ('own own it') and wrong object form. Use past tense 'didn't own' to match 'was so strict before' and use 'one' as a pronoun referring to 'a bike'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use 'own one' for clarity; avoid repeating words and maintain correct word order ('didn't own one').

× That's why I usually borrowed my friend's bike to ride.

✓ That's why I usually borrowed my friend's bike to ride it.

The clause 'to ride' is incomplete without an object or pronoun when referring back to 'bike'. Adding 'it' clarifies the action. Tense 'borrowed' is past and acceptable given past context. Suggestion: Include the pronoun 'it' when using an infinitive if the object was previously mentioned.

× I asked because, you know, there's a lot of people are kids, especially when my age, when my age.

✓ I think there were a lot of kids my age.

The original mixes structures ('there's a lot of people are kids') and repeats 'when my age'. Use a simple past construction 'there were a lot of kids my age' to express that many children of the same age used bikes. Suggestion: Use 'there are/were a lot of' + plural noun (kids) and avoid redundant phrases; keep subject and verb in correct order.

× So they write a bicycle like everyday they use it.

✓ So they rode bicycles every day.

The phrase 'write a bicycle' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'ride a bicycle'. Also 'everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverb phrase) — here 'every day' is needed. Use simple past 'rode' to match past context. Suggestion: Use the correct verb 'ride' (past: 'rode') and 'every day' as two words when meaning 'each day'.

× That's why I wish that I could have one when I was a kid.

✓ That's why I wished that I could have one when I was a kid.

The clause refers to a past desire; therefore past tense 'wished' fits better. Alternatively, 'I wish I could have had one when I was a kid' expresses regret about the past more naturally. The student mixed present 'wish' with past time frame. Suggestion: For past regrets use 'I wished' or 'I wish I could have had one' (present regret about past). Choose one consistent tense to convey the intended meaning.

× But now?

✓ But not now.

'But now?' as a fragment is unclear. 'But not now' completes the idea that the desire applied in the past but not at present. Alternatively, respond with a full sentence like 'But not anymore.' Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; use a full short sentence to express contrast between past and present.