自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward grammar (e.g., avoid "it's either in the morning" and "it really cost a lot of trouble"). Use past simple consistently for past routines.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I shared it with my brother. We took turns using it each morning, which sometimes led to arguments because we both wanted it at the same time.

建议: Answer directly, then give a specific reason and an example using clear linking words. Correct small errors and remove repeated words. Use precise vocabulary like "became more popular" and "alternative mode of transport".

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. They became more popular during the pandemic because people wanted to exercise and avoid crowded public transport, so many chose cycling as an alternative mode of transport.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was little and me and my brother used to share it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was little and my brother and I used to share it.

The subject pronoun 'I' should be used rather than the object form 'me' when it appears in the subject of a clause. Also place 'my brother' before 'I' for natural word order. Suggestion: use 'my brother and I' when mentioning yourself with others as the subject.

× So in the morning it's either in the morning he will use it and then after his turn then it's my turn.

✓ So in the morning he would use it, and after his turn it would be my turn.

The original sentence is repetitive and mixes present contraction 'it's' with 'will' incorrectly for a habitual past routine. Use past habitual/modal 'would' or 'used to' to match 'I had' and 'used to share'. Also remove the repeated phrase 'in the morning' and the extra 'then' for clarity. Suggestion: maintain consistent past-habitual tense: 'he would use it... it would be my turn.'

× It really cost a lot of trouble between the two of us.

✓ It caused a lot of trouble between the two of us.

The verb 'cost' is incorrect here; 'cause' is the correct verb to indicate producing trouble. The original also uses an awkward adjective phrase 'a lot of trouble'—the corrected sentence uses 'caused a lot of trouble' which is natural. Suggestion: use 'cause' for problems or 'caused disagreements' for more specific meaning.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in the Philippines.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in the Philippines.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses the present tense appropriately to express a general opinion about current popularity. No change needed.

× I think it came when the pandemic happened in which people wanted to be more health conscious and so they they used it as an alternative.

✓ I think this trend started during the pandemic, when people wanted to be more health-conscious, so they used bikes as an alternative.

Problems: vague reference 'it' (unclear antecedent), awkward phrase 'in which people', doubled word 'they they', and missing hyphen in 'health-conscious'. The tense 'started during the pandemic' matches the time frame. Suggestion: replace 'it' with 'this trend', use 'during the pandemic' and 'when' to introduce the reason clause, remove duplication, and hyphenate 'health-conscious'.