自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, use a natural concise response, and add one brief supporting detail. Use past simple for past facts and avoid unnecessary words. Example structure: topic sentence + one supporting clause using a linking word if needed.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I often walked to school because my family couldn’t afford one.

建议: Focus on clarity and organization. Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, also). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., ‘many people are poor’, ‘terrain is mountainous’) and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, simple present). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford them. Also, the roads are often steep and mountainous, which makes cycling difficult for everyday travel.

× No, I have not a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

ID 6: The sentence mixes present tense ('have not') with a past-time expression ('when I was a child'). Use the past simple form for actions or states in the past. Negative past simple for 'have' is formed with 'did not have', not 'have not'. Suggestion: Use 'did not have' or 'I didn't have' for past negative statements.

× Honest, honestly, uh, I'm entrusted in my country, most of the people is cheap, it's not rich.

✓ Honestly, in my country most people are poor; it is not a rich country.

ID 13: The original uses 'Honest' and 'honestly' redundantly and awkwardly, and 'I'm entrusted' is incorrect word choice. 'Most of the people is cheap' contains wrong verb agreement and wrong adjective ('cheap' wrong meaning). Use 'most people are poor' and 'it is not a rich country'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'most people are' not 'is'. Suggestion: Start with a single discourse marker like 'Honestly,' and use 'most people are poor' or 'many people are poor.'

× So uh, under in addition, the topographic of the ways in our country is a mountain.

✓ Also, the terrain of the roads in our country is mountainous.

ID 11: The phrase 'under in addition' is incorrect; 'topographic of the ways' is wrong preposition and noun usage. Use 'Also' or 'In addition' for linking ideas. 'Topography' or 'terrain' is the correct noun; 'of the ways' should be 'of the roads' or simply 'the roads'. Use adjective 'mountainous' to describe terrain. Suggestion: Say 'Also, the terrain/roads are mountainous' or 'In addition, our country is mountainous, which makes roads difficult.'