自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with tense and keep answers concise and natural. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence (e.g., "No, I didn't have a bike"), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid repetition ("they were nervous about my driving skills" and "not safe" overlap).

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it would be unsafe for me. As a result, they didn't buy one, and I learned to walk and use public transport instead.

建议: Combine short sentences and use linking words to make the response coherent. Start with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and a concise consequence. Avoid sentence fragments like "Which causes..." and instead connect it to the previous sentence.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially among students and young people, but many adults prefer motor vehicles because they are faster and more convenient; this widespread car use contributes to environmental pollution.

× No, I do not have a bike.

✓ No, I did not have a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Do not have' is present tense; change to 'did not have' to match the time reference. Suggestion: Use past simple for states or possessions in the past (I did not have, I lived, I liked).

× When I was a child my parents thought it was not safe for me and they were nervous about my driving skills, so they never bought me one.

✓ When I was a child, my parents thought it was not safe for me and were nervous about my riding skills, so they never bought me one.

Minor issues: add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. 'Driving skills' is odd for a bicycle; 'riding skills' is more appropriate. The verbs 'thought', 'was', 'were', 'bought' are correctly in past tense. Suggestion: Use commas after introductory time clauses and choose vocabulary that fits the activity (riding for bikes).

× They use motor vehicles instead. Which causes environmental pollution.

✓ They use motor vehicles instead, which causes environmental pollution.

The original has a sentence fragment: 'Which causes environmental pollution' is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone. Combine it with the previous sentence using a comma to form a single complete sentence. Suggestion: Attach relative clauses to the main clause (use comma + which) or rephrase into a full sentence ('This causes environmental pollution').