自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 用简明、正确的时态和更自然的表达来回答；注意主谓一致和单复数；句子不宜太多且逻辑连贯。可以把回答分为主题句+1–2个具体细节，使用连接词使表达更流畅。举例：说明骑车的频率、对象和感受时态应一致，‘have’应为过去时‘had’，‘make’应为过去时‘made’。

示例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I rode it every afternoon with my friends around the neighborhood, which made me feel happy and free. It was my favorite possession back then.

建议: 减少口语填充词和重复，注意主谓一致与冠词使用，使用更精确的词汇。给出一张主题句后补充具体群体与用途，并用连接词衔接。例如：把‘student’改为复数‘students’，删除重复的‘also is also’，用‘commute to school’或‘get to school’替代。

示例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among primary school students. Many children use them to get to school because they are cheap, convenient and good exercise.

× Yeah, I have a bicycle.

✓ Yeah, I had a bicycle.

句子位于过去时背景（问的是童年是否有自行车）。原句用现在时“have”与上下文时态不一致。建议根据句子背景使用过去时“had”。

× It make me happy and free.

✓ It made me happy and free.

句子描述过去发生的情感，动词应使用过去式。原句用现在式“make”，与叙述的过去时间不一致。建议将动词改为过去式“made”。

× It's my favorite thing in my childhood.

✓ It was my favorite thing in my childhood.

同样句子描述过去的喜好，应使用过去时“was”。另外短语“in my childhood”与现在时搭配不当。建议把系动词改为过去式。

× Yeah, it's very popular in our in my country, especially among the primary school student.

✓ Yeah, it's very popular in my country, especially among primary school students.

句首“it's very popular”可以保留现在时表一般事实，但原句有重复词“in our in my country”造成冗余，应删去“in our”。名词复数错误：应为“students”而非单数“student”。建议去掉重复短语并把“student”改为复数。

× It also is also regarded as a as a vehicle to commute to school.

✓ It is also regarded as a vehicle for commuting to school.

原句有重复“also is also”和“a as a”，存在冗余和语序问题；另外习惯表达用“vehicle for commuting”或“vehicle to commute”时常用“for commuting”。建议删除重复词，调整为“is also regarded as a vehicle for commuting to school”。