自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, like), and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep to under five sentences. For example, state whether you had a bike, mention who you rode with, and describe a specific memory or feeling with a reason.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my younger brother, and we loved racing each other around the park because it felt exciting and freeing. As a result, those rides are one of my fondest childhood memories.

建议: Organize your answer: begin with a direct opinion, then use linking words (however, therefore, for example) to compare cities. Use clearer vocabulary (bike-sharing system, coastal city) and fewer hesitations. Give one specific example of where bikes are common and one reason why they are less common elsewhere.

示例: I think bike popularity varies by city. For example, in Seoul bike-sharing systems and dedicated bike lanes make cycling very common; therefore many people use bikes for short trips. However, in Busan, which is a coastal city with hilly streets, cycling is less popular because the terrain and layout make it less convenient.

× Yeah, I really, I was really like to umm, riding bike with my, my younger brother and normally we umm, every time like umm, umm, enjoy the speed of that riding a bike and it was so nice, umm, good experience for me.

✓ Yeah, I really liked riding a bike with my younger brother, and normally we enjoyed the speed of riding a bike; it was a very nice experience for me.

The original sentence mixes forms and tenses incorrectly. 'was really like to riding' should be 'really liked riding' — 'like' in past should be the past form 'liked' followed by gerund 'riding'. Also use 'a bike' (article) and past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'liked'. Remove redundant fillers and fix punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: use 'liked' + gerund for past habitual actions and keep consistent past tense verbs.

× I was really like to umm, riding bike with my, my younger brother

✓ I really liked riding a bike with my younger brother

In English, 'bike' requires an article when singular, so use 'a bike'. Also 'was really like to' is incorrect; use 'really liked' + gerund 'riding'. Suggestion: say 'I really liked riding a bike' for correct article and verb usage.

× I think it's depends on the UMM city but actually in Seoul there are a lot of light on bike like system, borrow system and which can people easily to use the bike.

✓ I think it depends on the city, but in Seoul there is a bike-sharing system that people can easily use.

Use 'it depends' not 'it's depends' — 'depends' is present tense verb and does not need 'is'. 'There is' is used for existence of a system (singular). 'Bike-sharing system' is the correct collocation instead of 'light on bike like system, borrow system'. Remove unnecessary 'which' and incorrect 'to' after 'can'. Suggestion: use 'it depends on' + noun, 'there is/are' correctly, and 'can' + base verb.

× But in Busan it's not capital city but it's like coast area but it's not common in the borrowed the bike so it's different.

✓ But Busan is not the capital; it is a coastal city, and borrowed bikes are not common there, so it is different.

Several preposition/article issues: use 'the capital' with article, 'coastal city' is the correct adjective-noun order, and say 'there' for location. 'Borrowed bikes' is the correct noun phrase instead of 'the borrowed the bike' and 'common there' is natural order. Also maintain parallel structure and use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'is not the capital', 'coastal city', and 'borrowed bikes are not common there.'

× in Seoul there are a lot of light on bike like system, borrow system and which can people easily to use the bike

✓ In Seoul there is a bike-sharing system that people can easily use.

Original uses 'there are a lot of light on bike like system' which is ungrammatical. Use 'there is' for a single system and 'bike-sharing system' as correct term. Relative clause should be 'that people can easily use' not 'which can people easily to use'. Suggestion: simplify and use correct 'there is/are' structure and word order in relative clauses.