自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and concision: correct tense and article use, avoid redundancy, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words.

示例: Yes, I did. I grew up in the 1990s when smartphones and widespread internet access were rare, so playing outside was common. As a result, I often rode my bike around the neighborhood with friends, which was one of my favorite activities.

建议: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary and grammar. Use a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., because, however). Avoid unclear phrases like "rice play" and ensure verbs agree in tense.

示例: They used to be popular, but not as much now. Because of smartphones and online entertainment, many people prefer staying indoors, so cycling has declined in popularity compared with when I was a child.

× Back in the 90s, smartphone was not exist and the Internet was not widely available, so kids spent most of their time outdoors and riding a bike was one of my favorite childhood activities.

✓ Back in the 90s, smartphones did not exist and the Internet was not widely available, so kids spent most of their time outdoors and riding a bike was one of my favorite childhood activities.

The phrase 'was not exist' is incorrect because 'exist' is a verb that requires the auxiliary 'do' in the past tense: 'did not exist.' Also 'smartphone' should be plural ('smartphones') when speaking generally. Use 'did not exist' for negation in simple past. Suggestion: Use 'did not' + base verb for past-tense negation and ensure noun number matches general reference.

× It was when I was a child, but now that Internet has became rice play, cycling is not the common activities for people anymore, so it is no longer popular in my country.

✓ It was when I was a child, but now that the Internet has become widespread, cycling is not a common activity for people anymore, so it is no longer popular in my country.

Multiple issues fixed following the allowed list: 'has became' is wrong because the correct past participle is 'become' after 'has' (present perfect). This falls under present participle/past participle issues but is corrected as present perfect formation. 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the' when referencing the global network. 'rice play' appears to be a mistaken phrase; context suggests 'widespread' or 'popular' — replaced with 'widespread.' 'cycling is not the common activities' has number agreement and article errors: 'a common activity' is correct. Suggestions: Use 'has become' for present perfect, include 'the' before Internet, choose the correct adjective for context ('widespread'), and match singular/plural ('a common activity').