自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler words (umm, uh) and complete your sentences. For example, say when you got the bike, who bought it, and why it was useful. Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I started school, because the school was nearby and it made travelling easier. I used it every day to go to class and back home, which saved time and felt fun.

建议: Answer directly then give specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors. Use correct comparative forms and clearer vocabulary: say 'more popular than before' and give 2 concise reasons (cost and traffic/time). Limit to 2–3 sentences and link ideas with words like 'because' and 'so'.

示例: Yes, bikes have become more popular than before. This is mainly because they are cheaper to use and help people avoid traffic, so commuters can save time and money.

× Actually, umm, when I started, uh, school, my father bought a, a small bike to, uh, I'm going into school and, umm, back home because, uh, my school was, uh, close to.

✓ Actually, when I started school, my father bought me a small bike to go to school and back home because my school was close by.

The original sentence has unclear and disfluent structure with missing and incorrect verb forms and objects. 'When I started, school' should be 'when I started school'. The verb 'bought a bike to, I'm going into school' is ungrammatical; it should be 'bought me a small bike to go to school and back home'. 'Close to' is incomplete; use 'close by' or 'close to my house'. Suggestion: remove filler words (umm, uh), place the time clause first, use the indirect object 'me' after 'bought', and use the infinitive 'to go' for purpose; finish location phrase with 'close by' or specify what it is close to.

× Well recently a little bit more than before because people now understand if they use them bike instead car and they can pay in cheaper and then and to a field or waste time in transport and.

✓ Well, recently bikes have become a bit more popular than before because people now understand that if they use bikes instead of cars they can pay less and save time on travel.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'use them bike' should be 'use bikes' or 'use them as bikes' but better 'use bikes'. 'Instead car' needs preposition 'instead of cars'. 'Pay in cheaper' is incorrect; use 'pay less'. 'Waste time in transport' should be 'save time on travel' (opposite meaning intended). Also tense and agreement improved: 'have become... more popular' fits present relevance. Suggestion: remove extra conjunctions, use 'instead of', 'pay less' and 'save time on travel' for clear meaning.