自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No and a simple statement), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations, repetitions, and unclear words. Use correct verbs and vocabulary (e.g., "ride a bike" not "write", "motorbike" or "scooter" if that's what you mean). Keep to 2–4 short sentences and use a linking word if adding details.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it when I was about 8, and my older brother taught me in the park. At first I fell a few times, but after practicing for a week I could ride confidently.

建议: Answer directly then explain with clear reasons and specific examples. Avoid unclear phrases ("wash your shelves", "too race"). Use linking words like "because" or "however" to connect ideas. State your opinion, give one clear reason, and, if possible, a brief example or consequence. Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. However, I am worried because many children as young as 12 or 13 ride on busy roads, which can be dangerous. For example, lack of helmets and heavy traffic lead to frequent accidents, so stricter safety rules are needed.

× Of course, when I want to show, I'm trying my best to learn to bike a MO motorcycle, you know, not not a motorcycle, a motor at maybe UH-15 like that.

✓ Of course. When I was young, I tried my best to learn to ride a motorbike, not a motorcycle, more like a moped or a small motorbike.

The original mixes present tense ('want') with past actions and contains awkward phrasing. The question asks about childhood, so use past tense ('was', 'tried') and the correct verbs ('learn to ride' not 'learn to bike' or 'learn how to write'). Also clarify vocabulary: 'moped' or 'small motorbike' instead of 'MO motorcycle' and remove filler words.

× And my brother helped me to learn how to write.

✓ And my brother helped me learn how to ride.

The verb 'write' is incorrect in context; the intended verb is 'ride'. Use past tense structure 'helped me learn' (omit 'to' after 'helped' is acceptable) and 'ride' for bicycles/motorbikes.

× Yes, but I think uh, bike ride a bike when they wash your shelves is too dangerous because in my country is like maybe just 12 or 13 they can ride a bike.

✓ Yes, but I think riding a bike when you are that young is too dangerous because in my country children can ride a bike at about 12 or 13.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and pronouns and mixes tenses. Use the gerund 'riding' for the activity and a clear subject 'you are that young' or 'children'. Fix word choice: 'wash your shelves' is meaningless here and likely mispronounced; replace with 'that young'. Ensure correct verb 'can ride' and article/subject presence.

× I think it's too race to be crashed or something like accidents.

✓ I think they're more likely to have accidents or crash if they start riding so young.

The original is ungrammatical and uses 'race' incorrectly. Rephrase to a clear subject ('they') and verb phrase ('are more likely to have accidents or crash'). This fixes sentence structure and conveys the intended meaning about higher accident risk.