自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and incorrect verbs, and give a brief specific reason. Use correct past tense and simple vocabulary. Limit to 2–3 sentences and add one specific detail (e.g., who you borrowed from or how you got around instead).

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. Instead, I usually walked to school or took the local bus with my sister.

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (because, for example, and). Use accurate adjectives (cheap, affordable) and correct word order. Keep it concise and avoid filler sounds.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips to work or the market since public transport can be crowded.

× No, I haven't applied. Uh, I did have a buy because we are poor family and my parents uh couldn't afford to buy a bite.

✓ No, I didn't have one. I did not have a bike because we were a poor family and my parents couldn't afford to buy one.

Multiple issues: incorrect auxiliary tense phrase 'I haven't applied' should be simple past 'I didn't have one' to answer past possession; 'did have a buy' uses wrong noun and article — use 'have a bike' or 'have one'; 'we are poor family' has wrong verb tense and missing article — use past 'we were a poor family' and include article 'a'; 'buy a bite' is a word choice error ('bite' vs 'bike') and repetition of 'buy' is unnecessary. Suggestion: Use simple past for past states and correct nouns/articles: 'I didn't have one. We were a poor family and my parents couldn't afford to buy a bike.'

× Yes, I think by our popular in my country, uh, because uh, it's very important and it's easy to buy uh, because it is very not expensive.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are very useful and not expensive, so many people can afford them.

Problems: 'by our popular' is ungrammatical — use 'bikes are popular'; 'it's very important' is awkward for objects — use 'useful' for bikes; 'it's easy to buy... because it is very not expensive' has double structure and wrong adverb placement and word order — use 'not expensive' or 'inexpensive'. Also maintain plural consistency 'bikes' and plural pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: Use subject-verb structure 'bikes are popular' and clear adjective 'useful' and correct adjective order: 'not expensive' or 'inexpensive'.

× All people can afford uh to go anywhere.

✓ People can afford to go anywhere.

Minor issues: 'All people' is wordy; keep simple 'People' or 'Most people'. 'Can afford to go anywhere' is grammatically acceptable but slightly unclear — it suggests they can afford transportation to go anywhere. Suggestion: Use 'People can afford to go anywhere' or 'Most people can afford to travel anywhere by bike.'